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Psalm 23

The LORD is my shepherd; I shall not want.
I follow His path and He takes my hand. 
I am delivered from dark angels’ taunt;
which only the righteous can understand.

With God by my side, I’m never afraid;
my time on this earth is all but a test.
Forgiving my sins, mistakes that I’ve made,
I trust in my Lord and He does the rest.

I am now safe, I sit at His table,
my cup is now full as He protects me.
I am His lamb, content in His stable;
my enemies hide as Christ set me free.

They run and hide at the sight of His sword;
here I shall dwell in the house of the Lord.

 

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Author notes

Please note that I followed the Psalm as in the Bible keeping the poem modern; yet I was still able to keep iambic pentameter and change the Volta at L9 as in Shakespeare’s poems.

 

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  • Poetess12
    February 8

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    I like the rhyme in your poem. It is very good. It's one of my favorite scriptures.

    Thank you for your entry


    • Amera gold member
      February 8
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      Thank you for the comment and applause. I'm sorry it wasn't what you were looking for. God bless you.


  • Denerica
    February 5
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    Amen.

    Simply beautiful about the 23rd Psalm, like a prayer too. Blessings.


  • melphleg gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Impressive. Most impressive. You kept the themes of the psalm while converting it to a wonderful sonnet. You made it very personal. I love it. This is the kind of piece that encourages the reader.


  • creationsfromheart
    August 5, 2008

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    this is beautiful Amera I love how in your own words you make an uderstanding so easily read from the bible, truly a lovely poem.

  • Kim6
    August 21, 2007
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    A lovely Christian poem. The verse is nice.


  • holly9
    July 23, 2007
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    Amen! A great penning. I really like the psalm 23, a lot.


  • smiley
    June 14, 2007

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    Amen

    I loved this piece.. Oh my God, I read Psalms 23 all the time.. excellent work here..

    Yvonne

  • Cwm
    June 14, 2007

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    Interesting

    I wasn't expecting an interpretation of a Bible verse, but all are welcome! Anywayz, thanks for entering...


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    Amera, I have to admit I like this side of you, it softens your personality a little to make up for those sharp claws you use to protect your Dad's back on AP> very nice write gal, very nice



    Dad


  • darkmermaid
    June 8, 2007
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    Awesome. It actually helped me to reflect on my purpose on earth.


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    This is of course perfectly executed and a great modern take on the spiritual point of the original. very empowering!!! I wrote a version of this a long time ago, though mine is kind of irreverent!

    Our Mom is our shepherd,
    no matter what we want.

    She maketh us to lie down between covers,
    whether we're tired or not.

    She leadeth us to the bath waters.
    She restoreth our cleanliness.

    She leadeth us in the paths of righteousness,
    for our own good.

    Yea, though we walk through the valley of the shadow of Dad,
    we will fear no pitfall, for she art with us;

    His rod and his staff she reminds us of
    when we get out of line.

    She preparest a table before us
    and anyone else who's hungry.

    She anointest our heads with shampoo;
    when our brother's cup runneth over into our hair.

    Surely goodness and mercy shall follow us
    all the days of our life,

    And we shall dwell in Her & Dad's house
    until we're 21, graduate from college, or get a job."
    Unless we move back after one or all of those don't work out.



    • Amera gold member
      June 8, 2007
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      "irreverent"? Not at all I think it's cool, thanks for sharing Sis.


  • Cannonsfire
    June 8, 2007
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    I am amazed. Love, C


  • Jessi-desensytized
    June 8, 2007

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    Awesome

    I think this poem is very very well written I love the lines

    They run and hide at the sight of His sword,
    so here I dwell in the house of the Lord.

    Keep it up I absolutely love it...


  • redradical
    June 8, 2007

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    Very incredible. This is completely beautiful. I've never attempted this form myself, but I think you did an amazing job. Beautiful write.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 8, 2007
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    Quitely Powerful

    I don't know a "iambic pentameter" from a verb, but I know I like this poem.
    Joe

  • Bob Fox
    June 8, 2007

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    In todays world

    I fear we may need a mighty, but a just God. I see troubles brewing & nothing good. I do hope He protects all. Peace be with you


  • PerVirtuous
    June 8, 2007
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    You are a joy! This is very very nice. Perfect pentameter. Great understanding. Three bunnies.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    June 8, 2007

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    A very lovely intepretation of Psalm 23, the most well known psalm, I believe for both Christians and Jews.


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    How often have I said this psalm in church, funerals or in song form. Thought you did an awesome job on writing this your way in this interpretation.


  • Swan song gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    You put a hole new meaning to th etwenty third psalm I believe King David would truly love to have you around when he was writing these.


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 7, 2007
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    Superb...and this is all I can
    say without wanting to cry....
    Love, lane


  • Candy6
    June 7, 2007

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    This sonnet poem is well written. My adoptive mom, Sandy's favorite bible verses are Psalm 23 and Proverbs 3:5&6. If she was alive she would love this poem. But I love this poem. Lord is our shepard and we are his sheeps.


  • Desire gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Holy Moly!!

    First can I say:
    I LOVE THIS!!!!
    I have quoted this Psalm many times for special Gems who needed comfort and Love how You presented this
    in a Sonnet no less
    Oy!!
    Powerful piece penned and Beautifully done!
    Form Queen

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 7, 2007
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    >>>>>>>>>>>>Psstt...forever teaching me in more ways than one, huh....not JUST about poetry eother BTW! TY for the "PQRST" stuff

  • Whoochi gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Dollface! I love these Amera translations of one of my fav books...you cast an easy light on what can be so profound and overwhelming.Truly comforting for those who believe...


  • azure85 gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    This is very beautiful, you have made a wonderful sonnet out of these well known verses. The form is perfect, and the true meaning of the words shine in your sonnet.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    I read the first line and was catapulted back in time to my Paul's funeral. I can't read the rest, but I know you'll have the form down pat. La x


    • Amera gold member
      June 7, 2007
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      I'm sorry Laura. That's why I wrote it. It's more uplifting than the actual Psalm that is recited at funerals.


  • Aeonna
    June 7, 2007

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    beautifully written

    sigh, you're truely are the mistress of all poetry and forms of poetry... an awesome masterpiece


    red roses


  • Griswold gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Beautifully written Amera, very prettily done, you are very good at this form. I must study it and attempt one of my own... Scott

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