Rythm of Sadness
Sittin' in classes.
Making this Sadness.
Hoping I get out
and be free!
Rythm of Sadness
in my heart.
wishin' I'd be free.
To do what I want I want to be.
Rythm of Sadness
made my life madness.
Give me my life back.
Thank you.
Rythm of Sadness
there's no more
Sadness
Author notes
I'm 10. And I hope I will win
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under Only ~ Pick a Title and Roll With it 2 by Amunet Wolfbane.
450 points, ended June 14, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I don't think anyone ever truly wants to be caught and trapped in sadness but yes it does happen
You have done well penning this piece and telling this story in just sixteen short lines.
Blessings
celticmoon
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awesome~
you laid out a whole story using 16 lines with a average of whatever words. really short lines. zapp.
how???
nice way you have with whipping your words into shape. does the reader tons.
The rhythm of sadness
has long been in the grave
The bell has sang it's song
to school i'm no longer a slave
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Wel its a really nice poem and wel written.. Talks about bieng free really.. Atleast to me it does.. Gud luck my dear
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BREAK A LEG!
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I don't want to break a leg.
but if I do I could go on the computer all day.
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It means Good Luck in Ireland!
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Whatever!?
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Cool,so cool
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is this about not liking school? ryhthm of sadness -sittin in classes-.
anyways, very lovely poem i wish you luck in your contest!
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