Deep inside you feel a dark calling
All while you think about it you keep falling
Deeper and deeper you go
The feeling churns deep within you
The feeling of his hands all over you
His sweet touch making you quiver
The sweet sensations as his hands go to each spot
Driving you to pure orgasmic pleasure
Moment after pure moment you quiver
Your heart skips a beat
He drives in deeper
And you scream into the night
Fangs bite into your neck
Blood flows like a river
He dumps your body a short while after
Naked and pale but pleasure on your face
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Option 3
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WOW my friend I'm speechless so dark and beautiful full of intense moments I got lost in your piece
"The feeling of his hands all over you
His sweet touch making you quiver
The sweet sensations as his hands go to each spot
Driving you to pure orgasmic pleasure"
aHH my jaw dropped when I read this verse it's great
thank you very much for your entry your poem is a talented one
good luck in my contest I just hope I get more points
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Erotic Vampire Love... who doesn't love that. I really enjoy the freestyle form of writing. It leaves more of an emotional feel to the piece. It has an innocent yet dark feel to it. Like the first moment of love that is intencified by the feeling of pain. It kind of reminds me of the movie candyman, where its a horror movie with a little undertone of forbidden love. Great Write.
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gosh..
i like dis one a lot 2...!!!
you are a really good wright..=)
keep it up..
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creepy
nothing less than i would expect love lol beautifully dark and sexy kinda like you!
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nah i don't feel like replying. i'm kind of... umm... busy. ttyl.
lol. no this was a good poem. good job and i love the vamp. except the leaving her for dead part...
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