In the beginning,
when God created earth,
There were animals and 2 people,
Now there are more.
I was made awhile ago,
Not that much,
but some.
In the beginning,
I was not willing to share,
But now I am.
In the beginning,
I was bossy,
But now I'm less.
I change,
You change,
We All Change!
A contest entry
- OPTIONS (twelve and under only) by piccola.
700 points, ended July 15, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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450 points, ended January 13, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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It's true... we all change, i know people say you can never change completely but i believe you can... i have... and others i know have. Good poem to think about!
Thanks so much for entering and best of luck in the contest x -
This is so true! WE all change.....I like it. great write! thanks for entering my contest! :)
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welcome
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yayayayaya!
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I love your concept here, and it is very sincere. Smart of you to look back at when things started and relate it to now of what to do with more humans.
I chuckled in lines 5-7 how you look upon yourself asking others to still think of you as something even though you're only ten in comparison. He-he, the childish aspect of shyness was cute and worth it.
Managing these lines, "I was not willing to share,
But now I am" is really thoughtful of you peeking at your younger years. I'm impressed that someone so young as you could see your improvement for seriousness with enjoyment.
I have to say my favorite verses were the last three because it's true, we can learn to remodel our ways if there's a reason. And, with your case, you now see the need for portions with people. That is one nice thing, and I'm glad you realize there can be many others!
Nice to see your personality pop out without a eruption,
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pika the catlover what a wonderful write for the age of 10, and also I wish you hello from ohio hehe this is where i am from. Good luck in my contest
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I'm sorry I won't be considering this poem because you neglected to add a comment in your author's box about what you were going to do to reduce your carbon footprint which was the point of this Trade your GOLD in for GREEN contest. Hope you take the time to read the link and think about that anyway.
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I'm so glad that you're turning into such a nice guy. It's great when you learn you have a gift early on. It gives you years to develop you skill before being forced into the cold world.
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This is greaaaaaaaaaat. (beginning) but that's the only mistake I saw. I like how you used change and the creation of Adam and Eve and that now there are many more. What a nice idea
thank you for entering my contest.
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Yay Casey!
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was made awhile ago,
Not that much,
but some.
But now I'm less.
I change,
You change,
We All Change!
great piece! I like how you used teh "beginning" theme from the Bible, then used it for your life. That's really cool! Yea Bible! ^.^ Keep ti up!
pegleg -
it's true
And Cheezy too! not really though.
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In time we grow with wisdom and reason. Things that we felt as a child, we set aside. Sometimes it is nice to return to our younger years to be carefree once again. Nice poem about growing up! ~Sie
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You got a GOLDDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thanks!
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Thanks! .:)
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