I can read
You’re doing great up here
With all these words that rhyme
No limits seen
I watch
your endings perfectly
and I learn all the ways
just by your hand
Oh, write them down please
I know you can do it
You know how to tease me
with words that flow so great
Oh, write for me please
I know you can show me
do it on this screen here
Line by line to see
Stop doing free verse and show me today
how good you are
with this
That’s what you like
That’s what I wish
Make me feel special
Show it to me alone please
all these unlimmited words you write
rhyming all
Author notes
I found me 300 loot overhere,
http://allpoetry.com/contest/1906355
I found me a theme: a rhyming poem
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2038129
and I did not made a rhyming poem but tried to write something about this theme..*exhausted*I hope this can stand the test of rhyme..
(This is also a title used for The Titles Challenge group)
This is also for snow white queen
3. Song lyrics. Can you write something that is great in a song, but also great alone?
Well I don't know if it is that great*lol* but it took me a lot of time to write and because I love the music from Tryad a lot I decided to use a song by them..."I see"Now you can listen the song with the words here
A contest entry
- I FOUND THE LOOT! - 6000 + points-Partners in Crime Group ONLY by Partners In Crime.
450 points, ended June 14, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Option Contest by Beating.
600 points, ended June 14, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Help! i really need some inspiration by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended July 14, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Send Me A Poem by crystallynnbradford.
400 points, ended November 9, 2007, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I am already happy I could enter something......
Comments
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thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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"Make me feel special
Show it to me alone please
all these unlimmited words you write"
I really love that part. And it doesn't matter at all that this didn't ryhme. It's very poetic in the way it is.
I actually don't know the song, which made it a bit hard to sing along, but I tried my best, and I must say that it fittet the song really well. It is like your words really complimented the music. Wow! -
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Thank you..
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Congrats
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Good Write
Even though this doesn't ryhme it is still an awesome piece of writing. Well done and goo dluck in the contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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A good poem, even if it doesn't rhyme It sys a lot and is poetic, that's what's important.
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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This reminds me of a prayer/request to your muse..lol. I liked it. didn't miss the rhyming at all as it read very well.
Good luck in your contest.
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Good luck to you in the contest
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Thank you for the entry
hmmmmm, isn't this supposed to rhyme? lol
You are sneaky, just teasing us thinking any line now its gonna rhyme Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contestDove
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Dove........
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great and clever write my dear friend, best of luck in the contest
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Good luck in the contest
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You found a perfect use of free verse and the metaphor is brilliant. Seductive and sensual, yet still so elegant and tasteful. You captured me from the title right to the very last syllable in this piece. Very effective use of the title, a catchy tune indeed.
Thank you for sharing your gift with all of us, it's fantastic. Encore!!! Encore!!! Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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MUCH BETTER BRAVO. YOU ARE RIGHT> VERY GREAT
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Thnxs my friend...
If this will bring in big money..I will think of you
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well it is really good. and i am going to give you advice that a friend of mine gave me dont force the flow of it. never force it when it comes to writting lyrics because it will never come out right. this is very good but it needs a little more flow
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