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All Alone

Why'd you leave me?
We seemed so perfect for each other,
All the fun we had; the time we spent together,
But I guess it was all a lie.

You were my only friend,
The only person I could trust.
You made me feel happy to be alive,
But now you're gone.

Gone forever;
Never coming back.
You left me alone,
With no reason to live.

So here I sit,
All alone.
This house seems so empty
Without you.

I wish you'd come back,
But also I don't.
If you come back what's to stop you
From breaking my heart again?

I wish I could let go,
I wish i could move on.
Why did you leave me?
Don't you care at all?

No you don't,
You never cared.
It was all just a lie,
And I believed you.

And now I won't be able to believe anyone,
Or trust anyone.
I'll be all alone,
Forever.

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This is dedicated to the one who broke my heart.

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  • Cynthia
    January 22, 2008

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    Excellent

    First off, let me say, congrats on your Honorable Mentions.
    You did a wonderful job with this write.
    Deserved for sure.
    Well done.
    Secondly, this piece is such a sad, yet beautifully penned piece of poetry.
    Keep up with the great work.
    Keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing.
    *S* Cynthia


  • DancingRed
    September 26, 2007
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    "Gone forever;
    Never coming back.
    You left me alone"
    -- I like the repetition of ideas here; it makes for a very powerful poem.

    In the third last stanza you missed capitalisation on an I. Might want to fix that.

    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • Plastic Dreams
    September 1, 2007
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    The feeling of being alone is the most gruesome thought imaginable to myself. The contemplation you go through in discovering yourself seems in term, cold at heart and raw at hand.

    A broken heart sometimes cures the world of trust, but trust is the only way to love.


    Much in need are we for another half of everything.


    well done. :


  • The Imperfection
    September 1, 2007
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    u hav no idea how much i can relate to this...wow...it's breathtaking. great job!!!


  • Taxing Minds
    July 27, 2007
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    A very sad write. Thank you for pouring your heart into a poem. Good job


  • Angel of Diamonds
    July 20, 2007

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    well done this is a great write that expresses a lot of problems that people have woth love, good luck!


  • Dark Angel Reborn
    July 20, 2007

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    I really really liked this. I connected so well with it. Definatly an amazing piece written by an amazing writer. Great job and thanks soooo much for entering


  • Cutie4eva
    July 18, 2007

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    Wow, this is so sad. A love lost. I am sure it hurts too and I see friends go through it and wonder why fall in love in the first place. Well done and best of luck to you in the contest. xAngelx4xLif


  • GlowstickOfLove
    July 18, 2007
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    Very Good!

    ♥--T.R;


  • stop a bullet
    July 15, 2007

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    This was pretty good. It seemed a little off to me.. and very.. can't think of a good word... anyway.. good luck and thanks for entering

    }{ALEY


  • reckless abandon
    July 14, 2007

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    This is good, but I can't help thinking it's just as good as all the other poems written on this same topic. Thanks for entering the contest!

    -KP]


  • thelovesongwriter
    June 14, 2007
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    sounds similar to many other poems i've read, but good job anyways and good luck!


  • a means to an end
    June 14, 2007

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    this is reallly sad. i liked that it didnt rhyme like almost every other poem i've read. i also liked how muchmeotion is in this peice. great write


  • vampireblood
    June 11, 2007

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    This is a good piece. Its quite sad... But unfortunetly I can relate in a way. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
    ~~~Vampy~~~

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    June 9, 2007

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    This is a very nice write thank you for shairng it with me and adding it to the contest. Best of luck to you

  • stupid101
    June 7, 2007
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    Really heart-breaking...reminds me of the song "Since You've Been Gone" by Kelly Clarkson.

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