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We Made The Whole World Jealous

All that I have left now
are cigarette ashes and tar-stained fingers
and memories of you
as I sit in the porch swing...alone
sipping my diet coke and whiskey
remembering how good we were...together
like hot apple pie and vanilla ice cream
like peanut butter and jelly or strawberries and cream
like Dean and Frank and the boys...makin' some noise
or Ginger and Gene, oh they danced like a dream

We made the whole world jealous
for a while...yes we did
on those hot, hazy summer  days
when we'd meet at the oak tree
just off Johnson's old dirt road
your sweet summer embrace
I remember it well
and the smell
a vision of lilacs and a flower bouquet
we would stay there for hours
speaking of dreams...and of love
I'd get lost in your eyes
a mid-summer night's blue
and the heat of the day
like a torch cutting through metal
would spark unquenched desires

we would lay there on fire
welded together as one
the ground all around us being warmed
by our heat and the sun
and the soft gentle touch
of your warm tender lips
as you straddled my hips
a mid-afternoon shower
disguises our sweat
rejuvenating our passion
as it drips off of your hair

forming a shape on my chest
a heart shaped locket filled with dreams

now it's tears and memories
and I smile...as I stare into your eyes
running my fingers through your hair
lying there under our sheets of passion
hoping...wishing these days would never end

holding on...to this picture

 in my head

from the night stand

by my bed

as I take another sip...and sigh

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whyitt u


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  • This poem holds alot within it.
    I have noted the amount of trophies it has won before now.
    Ominous.
    This is the poetry of a truly talented writer and I appreciate it but unfortunately haven't felt these emotions before.
    Wonderful nonetheless.
    Thank you for entering this into my contest.


  • Nostalgic Moon
    February 8

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    ahhhhhhhhhh I love this I'm not sure what to say about it besides that... but I love it. Especially the ending, its so happy yet so sad at the same time! amazing.

    Thank you for entereing!

  • what is to say, amazing... such vivid descriptions. I really felt as if I was an intruder on an obviously intimate moment.


  • echo-ink
    January 5
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    AWESOME~~~I loved it.


  • hey charlie
    April 26, 2008

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    Wonderful write. It wasn't incredibly sappy and heartbreaking and you went into detail about good memories. However, I think you turned me diabetic talking about all of those sweets in the beginning. Lol. Thanks for entering and rocking my contest.


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    March 10, 2008
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    i like this poem, and glad i got to read it, however, i am sorry to admit, i cannot accept this entry, as per guidlines suggest that your poem can only have ONE gold trophy...but thank you again for your submission, hopefully you took advantage of the multiple entry option


  • Tangled Angle
    March 4, 2008

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    "blanket of love" -so cliche.

    Besides that, this was excellent. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Luminescence
    February 27, 2008

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    yum.... hot apple pie and ice cream.... thanks for making me hungary... lol

    Great poem... it was wonderful.

    Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck,
    ~lumin


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    This is very sad indeed. I'm so sorry you have loved and lost, I wouldn't wish it on anyone. I loved the title, I like the way you describe how it used to be, but is no more. Makes me feel very sad


  • ellipsist
    February 13, 2008
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    some very beautiful phrasing throughout... vivid imagery - effective use of metaphor!


  • Metaphorist
    February 7, 2008

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    I'm guesing the last three I've read were from the same author. Very similar ideas. All good in their own respects. Thanks for entering.


  • Naridill gold member
    January 28, 2008

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    Tempting phrasing - I love the word choice and intriguing style here. Very well painted.

    Thanks for entering,

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 21, 2007

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    A very strong and passionate write. I'm a sucker for the melancholy of memories, especially when they are this well penned. ~Genie~


  • Megan Awesome
    December 8, 2007

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    Wow. This is really good. And also really sad. I love the description. Beautifully written. On a scale from one to ten I'd give it an 8. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
    Megan


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    November 30, 2007

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    Very skillfully written
    It tells such a tale
    Very well written again lol


    Cindy
    If your a winner cousin would be cool or we will see what happens


  • purpledragonfly
    July 26, 2007

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    summer memories... wonderful and yet sad
    this was full of emotion and beautiful imagery. Congratulations on the gold and good luck in the contest(s). I loved it! Betsy


  • tawk gold member
    July 20, 2007

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    Congrats on the Gold. Such wonderful yet sad memories of a love lost. Excellent imagery and emotions. Good luck in the contest


  • second-born
    July 16, 2007

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    yes indeed you made the whole world jealous for such a fantastic poem about summer memories...it has a nice flow and reminiscing is so easy to do while reading your poem...


  • Frogzter gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    Some warm fuzzy moments in this piece! Great imagery. Thanks for sharing and entering the contest! Best wishes!

    Frogz~


  • Frozentearz
    July 9, 2007

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    First of all congratulations on your Gold,
    And thank you for sharing with us in our Summer time
    contest, Lots of memories play out within this.
    Warm thoughts
    Frozentearz


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    July 9, 2007

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    ahhhh what memories

    so relaxing and yet so dreamy as I sit here and read this, wonder what it would be like in this day and age ..with that special person...thanks for sharing MM


  • grass
    June 8, 2007

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    Oh my fucking god. Whyitt, I am blown away. This is the most beautiful thing I've read in god only knows how long. I'm stunned. You're amazing. I don't know how you do it.


    • Whyitt U
      June 9, 2007
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      Wow...thanks, that means a lot coming from you. I am happy it blew you away...and I love your comment


  • Angierie
    June 7, 2007

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    This is amazing Wyatt.. seriously just wow..

    "a heart shaped locket filled with dreams"

    Amazing Wyatt.. perfection as always

    Angie

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