you screwed me over
had brought me down
damn it;
captured the moment, held it,
then threw it back, in my face;
holding that blade of hardened steel
plunging it deep, twisting it twice
a roar of laughter filled
the silence of what was;
as my life bled out
heard you beg and pray
on bended knees for mercy;
your god she took that out bound train
riding it through till mornings light;
when new day dawns
I’ll rise above
you pissed me off
when you screwed me hard;
now it’s my turn baby
look out here I come
damn do I want to waste my time…..
Author notes
dustookie2
I was lied to on just about all fronts....believed the lies spun even defended him ....after many months of thinking we would be together the wife appeared on the scene followed closely by the lover .... followed by the sorry did not mean to hurt me......
A contest entry
- Broken promisses... by Wolf Mistress.
1200 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
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I loved the anger you showed in your words...and the look out here I come...It's hard when you're the one lied too, when you find out there already is a wife on the scene...but I see you were capable of moving on...
May all the love you need be there with you now
Good luck in my contest
XXJeannette
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Last line stands tall
The emotion you have spent these last weeks has to be immense. I shut down and cannot write under this kind of load. I applaud that you can express yourself in whatever circumstances have brought all of this about. the poem is good as it stands. Others have already commented on the last line which resolves the conflict in a strange kind of satisfaction unrealized as yet. These reads have been so different for me, but I am so glad to have been a part of your transition. RC
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wow, with a vengeance no? that's some unadulterated anger captured in this, with a side dish of spite
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It is so hard when you love and get screwed over
hard to reach that point where hurt changes to anger . for me when I get to that point , if I ever do, it usually is no longer important enough to give it anymore time. I have a difficult time finding that anger , guess I'm a sucker for love when I fall I fall hard. wish sometimes I could find a way to be angry easier. Then again I am not one to be mad mad its not a good thing for me so I don't do it if at all possible to avoid. I think you find more anger in yourself for letting yourself go there in the fiorst place , your too big hearted to be too angry but realize thats a good thing , theres nothing wrong with giving from your heart
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NO! Don't you dare...I know you won't, that was for dramatic effect lol
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I love this it is inspiring not to let the barstard get you down, only you could pen something so good with just the right amount of emotion... awesome hun
Karen
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Good Girl!
Great to see the new found strength to let um' know your alive and well!! Take back your right to say what you want and do what you want which a part of being alive in spirit. Feels great huh!! Love this write, Don
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i like it. like the last line. is the person who caused the pain worth revenge? they usually fail on their own. damn, do i want to waste my time.smile.
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