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Proverbs 16:3

Commit thy works unto the LORD
His words are not to be ignored
So thy woes shall be abolished
and thy thoughts shall be established

‘Tis the Lord who sets bondsmen free
by reading His word; His decree
Love that heals a soul that anguished
and thy thoughts shall be established

So heed the words of God above
and sacrifice your pain for love
‘Tis your soul that He has cherished
and thy thoughts shall be established

Commit thy works unto the LORD
and thy thoughts shall be established

 

 

Author notes

(KJV) Proverbs 16:3 Commit thy works unto the LORD, and thy thoughts shall be established

Kyrielle Sonnet
A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:
AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.
Resource: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Rovingone gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    Such a beautiful work of verse and with such a deeply moving message. That is what we need to do, all of us. Sacrifice our pain for love. It makes me want to be a little more caring and attend to others needs over my own selfish ambitions. I think I need to tape this one to my refrigerator door so I'll see it everyday, first thing, when I am getting my coffee. It would be much more eye opening.


  • jo-el
    August 24, 2007

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    very powerful write indeed. included is the wisdom of many ages...sort that never fades with time. a truth one might even call imortal. establishment bein the result of work and labour blessed of jah. of course this refers to all mannner of work or labour...perhaps the birth of a child and its reering. the foundation established by such wisdom supports any great structure that reaches beyond the tree tops. which suggests a sort of royal kinship with Jah Himself as thought is established by divine precepts. such thinking is always the swiftest and most potent leading to pure love referred to in the 3rd stanza. thanks for sharing this. most excellent.

  • Kim6
    August 21, 2007
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    A great poem.


  • ellipsist
    June 7, 2007
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    wow...

    I am not certain what else to say! WOW! Amazing!


  • Swan song gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    That is a very nice dedication to Laura she is a very
    excellent poet. I love this form but I love more that it says and what it makes me feel.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    and thy thoughts shall be established

    Amera!!!!!!

    My god this touched me so much! Powerful write...Reading this I feel one can acheive anything.

    Love it!!! Yes, were on the same page, book and bookshelf!!!

    Love u too!


  • Desire gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Wow what a verse You have penned and the message You have brought forth!
    Powerful piece and presented so Beautifully!!!
    Form Queen
    Thank You for sharing this
    Loved it

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 7, 2007

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    What an amazingly beautiful and precious write! My word!
    If ever I needed to hear a message, this is the one!!! This is awesomely beautiful, my friend...a fine, uplifting, and encouraging piece! Your talent just astounds me and I'm very happy to come and read you!
    Wow!
    How beautiful!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Amera, I can see you on a pulpit, in a tent in the Kansas countryside, preaching your heart out, and not a bad thing to be doing either.

    All your dad does anymore is steal hubcaps.



    dad


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Yes you have written a lovely sonnet here - liked the rhythm, thyme, flow and how you have taken this proverb and made it your own.


  • PerVirtuous
    June 7, 2007
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    I bow to the spirit possessing you. Great work. Three Holy Bunnies.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 7, 2007

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    I am touched my friend your beautiful words bring out such wisdom for the tired soul and weary traveler...You are the best good-lock on the contest


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    You spoil me! Rendered speechless yet again! This is a beauty, both in form and in content. Thank you sister mine, I love you always!


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Psalm 36:9-"You are the giver of life.your light lets us enjoy life." splendid spirituality lifted up here DOLLFACE Needed to hear this right now, thanks and again, always teaching me.....love ya tons..xoxoxo


  • StarEyes
    June 7, 2007

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    WOW!!!!!!! What a read this one is!! I love it! I have never seen this style, but you are sooooooo good at these. I like to share some pieces with my aunt, would you allow me to share this one with her?


  • Rele anmwe
    June 7, 2007

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    This is a spectacular write with a serere pace of spontaneous rythm, I love the flow of the piece. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. Feels good to know the Word of GOd.

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