Strawberry sprinkles
of liquid sunshine
fall from snow cone skies
and cotton candy clouds,
drizzling over my daydreams.
Author notes
5 lines about RAIN but you can not use the word RAIN.
In a list
A contest entry
- QUICKIE 5 lines by Lyre-Bird-.
480 points, ended June 17, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thank you for entering "quickie 5 lines' Rain.....
wishing you the best of luck in the contest!!!!!!!!
Lyre-Bird- & freedom4me
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Nice short write Lori, good job of writing about rain without using the word. Thanks for sharing and keep them coming.
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Now I will look at rain in a completely different way thanks to you, Just beautiful, thanks.
Best of luck in the contest -
Wow!!
I just want to eat the sky after reading this piece
Love the images and Beautifully presented!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Loved it!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Wow, what a picture you paint with your words. It's a truly beautiful write Lori! Good luck!
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SUCH A LOVELY SCENE!
What a beautiful scene your words have brought to us my friend. I am there living this wonderful dream.
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Very, very well done, Lori! I think this is quite beautiful! Wishing you all the very best of everything; this looks like a winner to me
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excellent
I like the strawberry sprinkles and snow cone skies.
Also the last line.
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The title makes me want to take a trip. Excellent imagery and alliteration and now I want to take that trip even more. And now i'm hungry too.
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