Cadence
of fallen tears
cascading around me,
eternal waiting to behold
rainbow.
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cinquain
A contest entry
- QUICKIE 5 lines by Lyre-Bird-.
480 points, ended June 17, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thank you for entering "quickie 5 lines' Rain.....
wishing you the best of luck in the contest!!!!!!!!
Lyre-Bird- & freedom4me
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Nice metaphor of rain to tears that closes on such a hopeful note of "rainbow." You are wonderful at writing these cinquains, and very best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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Oh those tears from the sky, a hint of sadness and that hope and wait for the rainbow, lovely cinquain, I liked this with its imagery so vivid and a longing felt, beautifully done. Good Luck in the contest and all the best!
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Rain the tears of nature
as they fall they may seem of saddness only to bring life to the living
This very short yet very well put
I like this
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Nice alliteration and imagery. I like the word cadence. Great job.
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Amazing! You have a gift of painting an entire picture with a Cinquain. This is wonderful and I forsee a gold cup next to it.
Love,
Amera ♥
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This is a pretty cinquain, nice usage of form with vivid imagery. Thanks for sharing. La x
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