No luck for the lady,
I guess this proves religious folk,
perhaps still are hiding inside their own arses…and who could quite blame them? They’re…
Sick of the relative
Fear
Induced
Genocidal
Hierarchy
Truths, which are full of deception,
………but for our chosen leaders we make an exception.
Maybe, though, we are far to judgemental
to scared to have faith in a sick let down world,
running from disappointment,
to a doctors appointment…
Morphine will do the trick…I don’t doubt it
heart palpitations are filling the void, in your need for attention,
breaking routine for graffiti scarred women,
who are stretched to their limits, not easily broken,
learning their strength from those few who preceded,
survived the attacks of the modest misleaded…
dragged from the gutter by those who still heeded…
The original laws….of reality.
Author notes
Woah, purge much
A contest entry
- Raven Qualifier - Culture: Religion, Society and Politics by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This has an emotional impact on the reader. This us part of today world. It cuts to the core on many issues of concern. Intro really pulls the reader into the write. The last sentence has an impact at the end the next paragraph is equally as good. Then again the last sentence contains an impact. This is to get the reader to think about the words upon the page. There are many wrongs in the world we live in today. There are no quick fixes. It the reality that runs around our world today. Very well wrote
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Bam Ba Lam!
My dear niece,
Wow! I think one of those picket signs I'll be walking up and down anywhere you want!
You could stir a riot with these words - very powerful and you shoulder them well.
The best to you in the contest!
♥
Uncle Tang
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Well done. Your update makes the poem a bit sharper and more defined.
I think you have an interesting insight into life and show good language skills.
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reality...
Very good!
Good luck in the contest!
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hey, um, i just updated "no luck for a lady"...would you mind having another look?
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sharper...
Well done. Your update makes the poem a bit sharper and more defined.
I think you have an interesting insight into life and show good language skills.
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