Walk with me.
I have something to tell you.
Up there on the coast..
There is a lighthouse.
I loved her.. the shining light.
But eyes grow dim.
Keep up.. Ive much to show you.
Up in the sky, Tobias flies,
down here on earth
alligators stand guard
on the path to vacant eyes.
We were..
misguided
misrepresented
Dagda said, "Peace be with you"
and, "Love as thou wilt"
but brothers with guns
assulted the family home
and taught us what hate was
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Do unto me.. what you will
Strike me down.. for i surrendur
(and id give it up for candy)
Do you want to know the difference between you and me?
besides a smoother phyique..
You can be raped.
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That was life and that was death
that was all there was
when the meteors rained...
Im telling you, when the world caught fire and the library burned
we didnt care about dying anymore
and questions like.. "What does a sunset smell like?"
came to mind.
Ill tell you...
It smelled like her
she looked like glass
and I tasted blood.
Its given a recourse, of doubt and depth
for a second.. One said,
"I sink harshly into oblivion because it hurts more not to feel"
and one cried.. "Yes.. I did."
If ever I was to take the knife and cut out my soul..
it would have been because of shattered red diamonds.
Pacing and starring at computer screens and the click click
clatter
of a crazy boy, who never stoped typing
We never stop writing
and what was the Dream?
In fantasy we have licks and kisses
roaming tounges and bite marks
exploring with a blind persons ease
and carress with teeth and short breaths
Here tho, where my eyes have been opened
and many have called me a child
i sat still and watched them fall to apathy
i know that we dont eat sleep work shit or fuck
in any particular order or fashion
but love is everything
Love is what we ought to chase at least
or find
or have shoved in our face
rub our nose in it when it all falls apart
but for now.. rejoice in the life you have.
Give and take what your given
Treat people with an understanding
and at least try not to break their little hearts
oh non conformist.. when the world withers
what will numbers and stars be telling you?
Author notes
umm.. a few of them? Cousin, brother, something, not boy thing tho. sorry.
A contest entry
- Shooting Love Rays into my soon to be found AP family. *HAPPY GIGGLE SNORT CLING* by shirk.
850 points, ended July 11, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like this.
But Matthew, next time, put your screen name in the box thing.
Anyway;
The poem is nice. I still don't like ryhme, but you continiously prove to me that there is some hope for it.
Your poem is also very rhythmic.
(sorry for spelling errors in my critique. Not my strong side)
I think in this you are wonderfully abstract while holding a common theme. You don't get lost in your writing. Which I enjoy.
Thanks for the fabulous entry.
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This is really awesome
It's one of those things that I had to read over once or twice more.
You're great
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I have never read anything like this from you like ever, but I must say that this is the best piece i have read written by you so far.
your way with words is amazing.
and I could actually understand each and every word you had in this..
ohhh i loeed it.
bookmarking..
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This isn't as forwardly stated as your usual work; I like this piece.
Personally, I'm not fond of the very beginning, but the rest of the work is great, in my opinion.
It has a real nice Epic feeling without the piece becoming draggy or tedious. For the length, this reads in a quick pace. All the lines were broken up and structured.
I like the single dashes you used to break some stanzas up; I don't know, it's just aesthetically pleasing.
Great ending - even those who have no idea what you're talking about, can find something to relate to the poem. There's a lot of metaphorical images that so wonderfully flow together.
Good job.
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"i know that we dont eat sleep work shit
or fuck
in any particular order or fashion
but love is everything"
LMAO... Love it. =)
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