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Candlewax Dreams

 

Silk and satin temptation rules me
Desire inspires and soothes me
Chocolate frosted love moves me
Acerbic female scent to seduce me

Heated honey odors from our lust
Sizzling stings from candle of musk
Textures touched, tentatively adjust
Leaving me a moist satisfied husk

Bitter, sticky heaven within sweet eyes
Joined soft tactility of complete eyes
Moaning melody reflected in fleet eyes
Moist tenderness to gently greet eyes

Astringent aroma as wax again meets skin
Sweet sour taste of berry and champaign begins
Never before felt such demanding desire within
Intuitive foreplay results in such delicious sin

Author notes

From the pictures enclosed, a title option, and the entire word-bank:

Desire, Temptation, Silk, Satin, Chocolate, Heat, Honey, Melody, Felt, Move, Touch, Texture, Soft, Scent, Heaven, Intuitive, Sizzling, Sticky, Moist, Astringent, Sweet, Sour, Bitter, Moist

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  • HeavenScent4U
    June 18, 2007

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    i have read this several times and get the same feeling each time. first of all you've done a great job using all three things, title, pictures and entire word bank to boot you made this sweetly sensual and vivid. i think the rhyming was well done in the second and last stanza but i kind of got stuck in the first and last stanza when you repeated the word eyes at the end of each line. i don't know if that is maybe a form i am not aware of? however i think it ended up working well for you.

    i really like the look and feel of this and also your background thanks for entering our contest and good luck. be well and be blessed


  • Roaddog Wolf
    June 7, 2007

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    nice rythm and flow

    "Heated honey odors from our lust" the scented suggestive tone of seduction rings out in your poem , good write


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    June 7, 2007

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    WOW! This poem was awesome hun! I really liked the way you put that pic between your verses very unique and something ive never seen before..your poem was very sweet and your words were just mind blowing..this poem was defintly passionate and erotic..i loved reading this! you never cease to amaze me with your talented..keep writting and good luck in the contest, not that you need it.keep penning your awesome at it!

    ~Chrissy~


  • slipperssun gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    this is a stunnig write of a love and sensuality true to only those involved... i wish you the best of luck in the contest
    cheers
    Jen


  • Fire N Ice
    June 7, 2007

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    Beautiful

    i've read this about 3 times, the words are soothing as well as sensual and the flow and rhyme are crisp and fresh,
    i love this, you have set the bar way high in this contest, exactly the sort of thing i wanted to see


  • 2lullabyhaven
    June 7, 2007
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    Sensuality heightened

    Word bank? well, you sure made it your own. Good luck to you in the contest. lol


  • Janice M Pickett silver member
    June 6, 2007

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    A masterpiece

    This rings with emotion, sensuality and a deep sense of a woman in love.
    An excellent poem in every way.
    HUGS
    Jan


  • Lady Altheia
    June 6, 2007

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    I think this was a wonderful poem. Your flow was perfect and the rhyme was creative with a touch sensuality.

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