This whole life is an hallucination
a product of this 'hallowed' nation
and we're all living it...
Somebody hold me
Don't turn the lights out
I've got nowhere to go but further down
Pressure building up inside - me
shiv.er.ing.
though its hot as hades
outside
Somebody hold me
Don't turn the lights out
I've got nowhere to go but further down
Somebody hold me
It's getting cold now
Dunno whats happening
Its so addicting
running its claws up and down me
I can't defeat it
I can resist
I just keep injecting it
O' this lust for feeling good
My God I'm aching
But somethings wrong
Something is not right
I think I'm losing my mind
Somebody hold me
Don't turn the lights out
I've got nowhere to go but further down
O' this lust for feeling good
My God I'm shaking
I'm cold to the bone
I'm losing control
I think I need to get some help
Somebody hold me
O God wont you hold me
Don't you dare leave me here
God I'm so frightened
I don't know whats happened
Someone get me out of here
Somebody hold me
Don't turn the lights out
I've got nowhere to go but further down
Somebody hold me
Don't turn the lights out
I've got nowhere to go but further down
Somebody....
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How lonely
Your poem was great. It reminds me of myself. I guess you really can find apart of yourself in someone's mind.
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Thorough Glass Darkly, Fill a KKD.
Trying out the short line lately,sometimes, I have been [I read Ai lately, an American poet; her scene was short lines, sharp images, sort of like her ship had come in to bay...onet!!...anyway...] it had me think howmuch punch a little short line might add to this here thang...
This whole life is
Hallucinated
Product of this
Hallowed nation
And we are
All living it.
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Sounds like heroin addiction, but not really (speaking from experience). Nonetheless, it is evocative of more than that, ellipses and all.
I thought the last line might be better phrased:
Some body.
as if in exclamation of revelation, dully.
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For the relentless nature communicated by the repetition, I applaud, as much as for the evident emotion underlying.
MA.
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I like it very much. Especially the first few lines.
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I love this repetetive motion I feel when I read the Chorus. I swear , it feels like a song. It feels good. But sad -so sad.
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Wow so deep
And yet is a bit scary and sad. Addiction is so sad but there is help for those that want it.
These lines really got to me;
"Its so addicting
running its claws up and down me
I can't defeat it
I can resist
I just keep injecting it
O' this lust for feeling good
My God I'm aching
But somethings wrong
Something is not right
I think I'm losing my mind"
LISA
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I'm gonna go out and say that this poem was making a reference to heroin...if so then damn I couldn't realate anymore to this poem...the desparation that you put into this poem completly jumps out at you...this poem was absolutly amazing...perfect if you ask me...awesome write...keep it up
P.S. Thanks for the back scratch
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Anytime! lol ^.^
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Wow
This speaks volumes. Really. lol
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