The love
I have for you
Fades more everyday,
No longer what it used to be.
I wish that you could see what you have done.
With open arms you'd make it right,
Save the love we once had,
Revive our spark,
My Love.
A contest entry
- Form Contest - Rictameter by Aussie Gypsy.
750 points, ended August 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a great piece full of emotion, my only little niggle is that the first line and last line are supposed to be the same 2 syllables, not different ones... well done on a great piece
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
Karen -
I like this structure. I've always thought it was interesting but never tried it. This poem brings out strong emotion in short simple lines and i find that very effective. Well done.
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oh this is sad i hope u find the spark again soon.. its horrible to realise you are falling out of love with someone, but i suppose its worse when you know ther fallin out of love with you..
gr8 write keep it up xxx
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