the cold chill of the wind
creeps beneath my sheet
eyes wide open as I lay
distracted by all that is
all that may be
and all that is to be done
my throat is parched
I long for liquid relief
yet cannot push myself
to get out of bed
where has my passion gone?
seems every day is the same
have I failed to follow
my dreams of long ago?
what if I rose tomorrow
and began to mend my existence?
will I do my best?
am I meant for more?
parched throat, broken dreams
eyes wide open, desire screams
violet lighting, thunder rolls
wasted life, longing tolls
Author notes
"I'll leave the light on for you."
Word Bank #1
Rose
Violet
Passion
Liquid
Cold
Push
Failed
Mend
Best
Distracted
To my friends, I'm fine! Just another inspired write from a word bank.
In a list
A contest entry
- A few different options, Everyone welcome! by Brucie.
450 points, ended June 12, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excellent!!
That was excellent!
Yes, I am back on here, and have a lot of catching up to do! I can't seem to sleep, and reading my allpoetry friends' poetry is a great pastime!
I especially enjoyed this write because I feel what you have written. Night after night I have been laying, distracted by my life and my future...it can be terrible at times. Long story short, I dig this poem because it relates so much to my life as of now.
I'm so glad to be back! :-) and if you have time, you should check out my insanity on storywrite (still find a dream)- I need feedback! :-)
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Wow
Thank you for this wonderful entry. I am glad to see that you are ok. I can really feel the emotions within this piece. Your rythm was great and I love the ending. Well done, and good luck in the contest. -
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Thank you for the wonderful comments and the inspiration to write! Wahoo!
Enjoy your contest!
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Wow, you can feel that one if you know what I mean.
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Cool! That's what I wanted, for you to read it and feel it.
Thanks for stopping by, Bionic Poet, nice to "see" you.
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WOW !
I'm glad you are ok, because this sounded so real. You have done an awesome job with this word bank
Best of luck in the contest 
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Thanks, Cuz! I'm glad it's not real, too! Actually, it's more of an extreme version of what I feel, you know, the what's to come, what's to do, that kind of stuff is still real, just not as extreme as I tried to portray in the poem, took the "normal" and tried to make it more "extreme." Anyhoo, still sitting on my butt on this computer, gotta get to cleaning some more for our house sale this weekend!
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....that's not creepy...and I LOVE that you put a I'm ok message. I was going to yell at you. I love you Ms. Kim!!!!
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ROSITA BONITA! Sheesh, seems like we haven't talked in weeks... which is probably true! Thanks for reading and commenting and leaving your lovely face for be to behold. So busy getting ready for our house sale this weekend. Love you! Mwah!
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Thanks for your notes after reading this
You are soooo good with word banks I take my hat off to you...whoops wrong move it is winter (ears freezing)... love how you ended this one Bunnykins!!!
MWAH
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Reclusey! Mwah! Yeah, I knew my friends would be worried, always gotta remember to put a note in there. When I first came on line and was "hangin'" with Carol (mzblondemoments - who by the way I miss so much!
) I wrote a poem with a twist about my brother dying but in the end I was just worrying about/imaging it but still going through emotions, I forgot to let her know before reading it that he didn't really die and her heart fell to the ground when she read the title "My Brother Died Today," or something close to that. I still feel bad when I think about it. Egads. I'm babbling, I did drink my coffee this morning, and I gotta get going already and get something done around here.
Love you!
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