This world is such a temptress in disguise.
She beckons me to visit every shore.
If in this life, I had time to explore,
such wonders never fail to mesmerise.
Each corner opening up a fresh surprise,
a new horizon’s what I’m searching for.
Mere mortal, always going back for more,
a traveller, ever seeking foreign skies.
Though nowhere that I’ve been, or yet adored,
compares to where I wish to end my days.
This land waits, ever patient, while I roam,
she knows I’ll never long remain abroad.
And still to-day my memory often strays,
but England’s lush green smile says “Welcome home.”
Author notes
Petrarchan Sonnet
x Empathic Rose x Option 2
In a list
A contest entry
- BATTLE OF SONNETS ROUND 2 by mamad.
550 points, ended June 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My Anniversary Bash On AP - Plenty Of Options!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
700 points, ended June 22, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ahh yes a very pretty sonnet that is too. Sometimes we need to hold a little more love and happiness in this world, not be miserable all the time as it really does effect how others feel. I liked this write. Thanks for entering.
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another sonnet form? how many are there? My poor overworked brain with two cells left in it is going to explode!!!
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You make it seem so easy...
Your iambic pentameter flows so smoothly. This poem would read like prose if you didn't break the lines (well, e'en is a dead giveaway, I suppose, but you get the idea).
There's only one loose board that needs nailing down, I reckon, and that's "New horizons I'm always searching for." You twisted the meter and the grammar - you can get away with one or the other, but given the excellence throughout I won't let you slide on both in one line ;-). Perhaps:
A new horizon's what I'm searching for.
That's still ending with a preposition, but up with it I can put. ;-) If up with it you can't put, you could try any of these handy lines...
A new horizon over which to soar.
A new Verizon at your local store.
Them new horizons never are a bore.
A new horizon voted for Al Gore.
A new horizon sang with Dinah Shore (no, wait, you already used shore).
The new horizons seen from tallest tor.
The new horizons sunk the Pinafore.
(All right, now you're just getting silly.)
Your poem makes me wish your homeland were mine to which I could return, but up with me I fear the queen won't put.
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Ah, This one. Now, does the apostrophe go before or after the exclamation mark? This prob. always catches me out. Does a full stop go before or after a quote mark. Getting free tuition here
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Your quotation marks in the last line are correct. Quotation marks go outside the punctuation, except in a couple of instances.
1) Quotation marks go inside a colon or semi-colon.
2) If you're quoting someone's excited speech, you put the exclamation point within the quotation.
"I just won the lottery!"
If you're excited about what someone else said, you put the exclamation point outside the quotation.
He just said "your mother is dead"!
3) If you're quoting someone's question, the question mark goes inside.
He turned to me and asked, "Did you understand that?"
If you're questioning someone's quote, the question mark goes outside the quotation marks.
Did he just say "I think I forgot my pants"?
There, that should clear everything up forever. Or not. ;-) -
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Oh crap, I sucked at english in school and I really suck at it now. Punctuation kills me every time.
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Hi, I enjoyed this one the most of all that I have in this contest so far. I love the subject matter, and the roaming bit. I think it would even be better if you had more imagry of what you've actually seen as you roamed, but I know you can only pack so much in! This would be great as part of a series. It's very beautiful, and the best I have read so far, in my very humble, and inexperienced opinion.
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bravo
"This land, this England!" an excellent Italain Sonnet (saving your presence!)A wonderful poem as I am very partial to this sonnet form! bravo...bravo...bravo... I loved it!
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Very Impressive
I am extremely impressed with the great visionary and flow through out this poem. excellent work and a very nice write as well. keep up the very good work
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Thank you very much. I am pleased that you are enjoying reading my stuff.
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wonderful
A really beautiful Italian sonnet that is a winner in my books, though I know I'm not the judge here. All I can say is that this was just a delightful read, and I hope you don't mind if I add you to my favorites list, because your poetry is marvelous.
(p.s. If you haven't already, I urge you to check out the poems of Eusebius, he is really the master of Italian Sonnets, as well a host of other forms)
All the best,
David Michaels
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Find a copy of Milton's poem "On His Blindness."Read it carefully.
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Ah, now I understand. I had got myself in a bit of a muddle with my counting.
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