I am bleeding
For the sake of happiness.
For the sake of happiness
I am leading,
Within my word an abandoned twinkle gives
The meaning.
The meaning of my world within that meaning.
I will never regret the line I draw
I will never forget the sign I saw
I will never reject a divine show
But until then there’s a story I should tell
I will never follow the high heavy bell
I will never follow the black ornamented shell
My soul defies.
An insight rise.
My emptiness is wise
Because I’m free
I’m what I want to be
Neither heaven nor hell teases me
And Finally you will see
“W-E Heaven”
A contest entry
- your inner personal thoughts by x Bright Eyes x.
700 points, ended July 22, 2007, 52 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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hi i thought this was very good liked how you make the reader think in this as well also like the flow and use of words thanks for entering and good luck in my contest
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I will never regret the line I draw
I will never forget the sign I saw
I will never reject a divine show
the "will" is the the essence of the freedom, and i hope that we all will have the "will" to be free
gr8 and awsome write as usual, u seems to never disappoint me, bil3akes, u keep amazing me.
peace
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heheh that's good to know friend. thks for your comments, now i know what i've been missing about ap
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hmm.. i like this one tho i think it is not my favorite of your! i still enjoyed reading as i always do!
"My emptiness is wise
Because I’m free
I’m what I want to be
Neither heaven nor hell teases me"
these lines are very good! i think the are the whole of this piece! to me it is the meaning of the poem "my "freedomology"" to show how nothing "tease", as in the words of the poet, or judges would be another word you could use!.. GOOD JOB!!
allie
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ok that's a good comment i think, i fact you're right, and perhaps that's the whole idea that i wanted to pass to all who will read this poem. In all and for all, to get the bigger picture, i write what i feel like writing u know, and for sure, if that's what meant to you the most then we're on the same track. thks again (Y)
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W E smack down , ok be serious
Because I’m free
I’m what I want to be
hope u really are since that is what am craving for
as usual excellent rhyming and flow
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a kiss will do miracles! 5 stars 4 example
hey that was sweet from u w mazelik heik (K)(K) w huh
and yes i'm as free as no one can accept, but the reason can. wat about ur freedomology
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