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Song of the Crucified Violin #2

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Staradivarius created the violin
From a piece of wood he found from Noah's ark
And with the inspiration of a song sounding in
The Throne room of God's heart-
And then-
History crucified the violin
All for the sake of art...

The firebird's face was like a chamber where the sun
Shed His evening rays then lies still
To briefly rest before wandering on
To another place behind some hill
His features these of which no one can forget
His eyes, his feathers every one
The literature not written the poetry not yet
And all things as yet undone.
My body was broken in his flame
Like that of a woman's heart for some man-
I became a windsong without a name
Aimlessly wandering across wasted land
Feeling neither love nor pain
And carrying a rose between my strings
Through dry hot days without rain
No wind no light and no sound
No hope no dream no loss no gain
Nor cold sweet water bubbling underground.


To be continued

Author notes

Inspired by the walk I took one night,
a walk down the path less taken.

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  • I must read the complete story

    Facinating write and It makes me want to see more .I will come back when finnished for shore

  • Lovely

    The flow is very smooth and consistant.
    It's perfect, it sound like it should be a hundred years old! Nobody can write like this any more, well except you of course.
    I loved it.

  • Bob Fox
    November 27, 2007

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    The writter

    The writter in you is just burning to break out. Stories awaiting and that mind so marvelous. Does fill me with envy


  • Cirion
    August 8, 2007

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    I am truly glad you stumbled onto my profile and left a comment, so that I could find and read your work. I did read quite a few of your writings which were all very well written. I'll comment on this since it in focus now, and since it isprehaps the one I appreciated most. This poem just drew me in and I was lost in time until I had finished it. I was left amazed and thoughtful, which is what makes a poem great to me...  


  • DarkBlaze128
    July 31, 2007

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    Amazing poem

    amazing, can't wait to hear more, I love how your writeing always seem to tie togeather, I really love reading your poems, your author notes make me think of Robert Frosts' poem.. And i, I chose the path less traveled by


  • left
    July 23, 2007

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    A heart in which celestial music lingers, no matter where it goes or what it does. Through barren pastures or places with lush vegetation, the music is always there, lingering, keeping alive the memory of Love. It will be yours again in measures beyond imagination, sweeter, more powerful and true than ever before. May The Light bless you, guide and protect you always,

    Chris


  • Gone
    July 23, 2007

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    this is awesome...

    your vocabulary is pretty stunning, but never seems forced or for show as is often the case on this site...

    you write with a beautiful intensity which I find almost sexy... hope that doesn't make me weird!

    x

    • Jalalbad gold member
      July 23, 2007
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      no you are not weird. You have a deep sence of insight. Thank you for the beautiful comment!

  • midnight eyes
    July 6, 2007
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    Wonderful


    Amber

    • Jalalbad gold member
      July 6, 2007
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      Thank you again Amber! The Song is special to me.

  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 5, 2007

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    Brilliant~

    Thanks for sharing hun...


    -Timothy aka poeticweaver


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    June 11, 2007

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    Pure, layered & Decadent!

    A gorgeous piece of layered philosophy coupled
    with your personal revelation of this piece that
    can whine like the sting of a bee.

    I just love this. So open and honest..
    Only thing I would do differently is let up
    on nearly 'all' of the punctuation. Let this beauty
    ascend............f l y ~~~ It already has wings.

    Thank you for an excellent write with superb content.


  • CinematicInk
    June 10, 2007

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    The title's brilliant! The picture makes a nice match with the poem. I can't wait until part two!
    ps- thank you for your comment!
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