See my tears
falling from the sky,
into cracks,
into seams,
into rivers,
into lakes,
onto the ground,
running,running,
deeper within.
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the tears won't stop, always flowing. Since I lost him i'm almost always crying. Will it ever stop?
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- The Doomed Queen And Other Dark Options by Dead Hair.
450 points, ended July 7, 2007, 7 entries
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Im hoping for you that one day, your tears stop evaporating and never rain down again on your life, because I know how it feels
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How did your tears get in the sky?
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I love the relationship between your tears and the rain. Wonderful Write!
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I see the symbolism now. I like it!
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it will
it will stop doll... hopefully soon though by the way it seems you are so upset. It is a really good poem though - it all fits together nicely into a little package of sorrow.
Nikole
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itll stop, i know exactly how you feel. ive lost the love if my life. to another guy who treated her like shit and she didnt reolize it. the only difference is i got her back. if you need a little more help go read my poem called mutual. then if u want to camment and ill talk if u would like.
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the repetition in the middle emphasizes the points. I might change the title though. Maybe, The Waterfall. I've just seen quite a few poems about water lately.
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i rote about the rain bc it was raining and the day my ex dumped me it was raining so i had to call it that but i can see how waterfall might play in still.
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short and sweet i like it, crying is a thing i do a bunch of 2.
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Great write. like the rythm. fast and quick, but such a smack in the face
keep it up!
The Shi
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Ah, I know how you feel. It's hard, it's unbarable but try a little to forget about him. I also know this is hard too...but that's the only way you can help yourself. If YOU try to make it happen. I know you can. Just try to stop the tears, to stop the memories, to forget everything. I'm not saying it would be easy, but believe me, it would be WORTH.
About the poem: short, great, nice words. Like it. It's more important that it's written with feelings, from the heart.
Keep writing and God Bless
Hope you will be better.
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its like a truce.
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wow-very emotional
I like how you describe where it all spread. its ok to cry, but you do move on. Trust the Lord; he'll help you if you let him
great piece keep itup!
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yeah Gods already helping alot but ever now and again ill start to cry and miss him
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It will stop. When it is time for you to stop crying. Until then the tears are a cleansing force wiping away emotions and leaving you exhausted so there's no time for contemplation on anything else. Sometimes it seems as if they will never stop that the pain threatens to overwhelm you and you dont know if you can ever be the person you were before. Truth is you will never be. Losing someone in your life be it to death, divorce, or breakup changes things within you.
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