Empty, dust-filled, cardboard boxes
and steamy, burnt love letters
the scent of our love that summer
still lingers in my mind
It started out so innocent
a diet coke and nervous smile
it turned into sizzling passion
and fireflies in the night
the sweat beading up like rain
on my freshly waxed convertible
running down your frame
like tears from my blood stained eyes
remembering all the touches
and the sweet melon scent of your hair
all the feelings that we shared
beneath the moon and stars
your footprints on the dashboard
as you shined brightly
in the glow
watching me grow
from a boy into a man
the gentle touch of your hand
was all I needed
on those hot and humid nights
our bodies moving to the beat
of the songs
we played til dawn
through the thunder and the rain
my desires turned to flames
until you blew them out
Satisfaction was there for the taking
and the memories are etched in my tears forever
Author notes
whyitt u.
A contest entry
- Help! i really need some inspiration by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended July 14, 2007, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is full of such rich description, a wonderful poetic story. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. good luck.
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whisper
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this is so powerful, an amazing poem with such passion and emotion expressed throught the words. thank you very much for your entry, and best of luck
lucy
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omg, dude, I just removed this from the contest on accident. My bad.
It's cool, I suppose, if you don't want to go through the trouble of re-entering it. Your latest one was even better.
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Yea...no big deal. It's a pre-write now, so it won't let me re-enter it...if you want it in there, I could copy and re-post it as new, if not, we can just leave it as is....oh, and thanks for the great comment, I don't think I've ever been called "genius" before
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This is amazing Wyatt.
so much imagery and emotion.
Love it!!
Angie
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This, my dear boy, is genius. I love the nostalgia and the sensuality of it all. One complaint, gramatically:
"Empty, dust filled, cardboard boxes"- it should be dust-filled.
You're fantastic Mister Whyitt. Keep writing for me! -
wow this is absolutely beautiful! i love the free verse! ...great write, such love...keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
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