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Pirate Story

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Pirate Story

Aye; me given birth name be Jacqueline LaPue
And dwell ‘neath the colours of cross bone and skull
O the tale that I tell is known but by few
From our pirate schooner with long lissome hull
We rule the ocean ‘neath a sky of blue
The name of our ship be the Laughing Gull
We be well armed with brass guns amidships
And brandishing cutlasses at our hips

One day we set sail for treasure we seek
‘twas north by north, we laid chase to our prey
The merchant ship laden aye, we rigged her to leak
Our gun barrels sounded; to their dismay
We boarded their ship, they were so weak
O the fight was bloody that fateful day
We outnumbered the scoundrels attacking their flank
The ones that were left, we made walk the plank

We counted the treasure and chests of gold
Glimmering gems were a thing of beauty
With spoils of war we filled up the hold
We scuttled their ship, we kept the bootie
Then danced on the poop deck the story is told
We drank too much rum, the keg was a beauty
The flap of the fo'c'sle then took us away
For the life of a pirate there is much to say

 

 

 

Author notes

Ottava Rima
A Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octives.
Rhyme scheme:
one octive poem. abababcc
two octive poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octive poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

 

 

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  • Thor-201
    April 16

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    I love the poem, and the form is unusual, and very fitting to your wonderful tale here. Best of luck.
    Be well,
    Trent

  • Arrgh, a fine n’ dandy piece of litteryture ye ‘ave ‘ere, by me reckonin’. Split me sides if enjoy it arr dinny. N’ ye be only a slip of a puss unless I be mistook? Bend yer ear t’ this. I warrant me ye ‘ave writ a good, grande poem ‘ere, I be impress’d at fo’c’sle, arrgh. If God be kind ye will fare well, savvy?

    • Amera gold member
      April 16
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      Aye cap’n savey I do. I see yer ship jus blew in frm der southern seas. Could ye be lookin fer a good 'n healthy winch ta be servin on yer crew? I gots all ma teeth 'n I c'n charm wit da best of 'em.


  • queen Moderators member
    February 19, 2008
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    I can almost feel the salt sea air good poem, good luck in the contest


  • madskillbassist1
    February 19, 2008
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    I really liked this form. I also like the terms you use in this. Very good write.


  • Commodore Rouge
    December 3, 2007

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    Spiffy

    that was brilliant! I loved the nautical terms and the unique rhyming scheme. I admire stuff like this that is out of the ordinary like that. Keep it up!


  • reckless abandon
    June 29, 2007

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    I've never seen this form before, but I like it. This is a great tale of pirates to tell, and it was nicely done with this poem. Thank you for entering.

    -KP]


  • hoodoolover silver member
    June 19, 2007
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    Grrrrreat Fun!

    First off, I love the form, and the pirate language you have nailed down to the plank! Love it!


  • ObsidianEntity
    June 15, 2007

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    Yay! You used my favorite picture! lol Anyway, your work is creative and original, and your rhyming is spot on. You have use an interesting form as well, which really adds colour and difference to it. Brilliant imagery and great descriptions, thank you for entering.


  • Never Fall in Love
    June 8, 2007

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    haha .. "poop deck"

    Aye, you sure you aren't a pirate?
    O.o
    I'm having doubts on you now lil' missy
    (wait .. im the lil one here oh wells)
    Another excellent write from you
    I admire your talent in poetry
    Because you do good in two things :
    1... your forms always come out great
    2... you can take any view and write about it
    but if you think about it
    when you put those two together
    you become like the best poetess alive!!!
    woah .. im an ap sister of the best
    thats awesome! .. no, seriously .. it is

    lol
    Great write
    love ya ♥

    NeveR ♥


  • Florida Sunshine
    June 7, 2007
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    you sure sound just like a pirate... the backgroud is totally freakin awesome !!!!


  • Swan song gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    I have read thi sbefore and you know what It is even better the next time you read it. Very good. I love the way your mind works


  • erininthesky
    June 7, 2007

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    Whooaaa. Amazing, you're DEFINATELY going to win, I can just tell. An amazing write, with such detail and metaphors. Love it! ♥ ERiiN


  • maa gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    this sort of poem suits you so well, amera ...
    you just excell in writing in this style ... the whole scenario came alife on my mind's screen, and there's much emotion and passion invested in your words ...
    amazing ...

    maa


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 6, 2007

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    Is captain Jack Sparrow around? Did he leave a comment? What can I say, you just amaze me all the time. Another great one..
    Love ya
    Soulful Woman


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 6, 2007

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    The parrot wished to come back for a re-read Pieces of eight! Pieces of eight!


  • PerVirtuous
    June 6, 2007

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    Well, blow me down! If'n this isn't the most treasure filled write me seen in a bountiful age! Me likey! Great story! Three bunnies.


    • Amera gold member
      June 6, 2007
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      Aye! But ye are one land lubber that shivers me timbers and blows me down swabbie.


  • StarEyes
    June 6, 2007

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    Holy smokes........

    This is beyond words... I don't normally writes story type poetry, but you are very good at it! I love this one!!! Best of luck in this contest my friend!!!!


    • Amera gold member
      June 6, 2007
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      Thanks sunshinegirl! This was a fun write. I saw the contest and couldn't turn it down.


  • Desire gold member
    June 6, 2007
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    Holy Mother of Pearl!!


    Oy!!!
    What a verse You have penned and shiver me timbers
    Love the form You used and three Ottava Rimas
    Wow!!!!
    Brilliant story
    Form Queen
    Love this one!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

    • Amera gold member
      June 6, 2007
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      thank you Desire, your comments are so much fun! It seems my poems are just missing something without your mark of approval.


      • Desire gold member
        June 6, 2007

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        I have to inhale the Form Queen's essence or my day sucks like chickens

  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 6, 2007
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    Aye me hearties! This sounded like a tale spun by Jack Sparrow! Excellent imagery sis and use of form, this transported me into another world. Very much enjoyed the read. Well done with this! Love you. Laura


    • Amera gold member
      June 6, 2007
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      Laura

      Thanks Sis! You speak pirate!..


  • sunny day
    June 6, 2007

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    Yo Ho Ho and a Bottle of Rum!!!!!

    Avast ye matie, A wonderful tale yer have written about the scourges of the sea in days of old. Yer rhythm and rhyme cut through the waves steadily as The Laughing Gull readied for attack on the helpless merchant ship. Marvelous was the imagery as I could picture the pirates boarding as they would swing cross or leap across after grappling their hooks into the waiting prey. I am a lover of the sea and old pirate stories. I think Captain Blood with Errol Flynn has to be one of my all time faves. You truly brought me back with this excellent form which is another I have yet to attempt. Thank you for sharing and it sounds golden to me. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      June 6, 2007

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      sunny day

      Thank you Joyce, I love this comment. I thought you were a pirate at heart.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 6, 2007

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    A very interesting and well done write here gal as well as a vivid story. Meself, I prefer women who are swashbuckling and can pirate me heart regardless of me wooden leg or nasty parrot.

    Dad

  • Swan song gold member
    June 6, 2007
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    This was good but I got a laugh out of it for two reasons one how your made those poor guys walk the plank You meany! And the poop deck which is a real deck on sailing ships also called poop deck for others reasons which created quite a visual. Thanks!

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