Babydoll,
Sorry to disappoint you.
I thought you already knew.
You're just wasting your p r e c i o u s time on me.
I'm just another [pretty.little.fuck.up],
Way to colorful to go with your black and white world.
I'm not so beautiful anymore;
am i, love?
It didnt take you long,
To figure out the sweet n.o.t.h.i.n.g.s i kept wispering in your ear.
{The /fabricated\ anythings you wanted to hear}
Yah, baby,
They were nothing but ((la-la-lies)).
So sorry hun,
It wasnt you,
It was all me.
Try not to miss me dollface,
I wont think of you,
I'll be with him [Insert name here]
You were just too black and white for my g*l*i*t*t*e*r*e*d up heroin world.
{You'll get over------>me love, i promise}
Author notes
Paintedparispassion loves you!
A contest entry
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oh fucking excellent!!
glittered herion world =fantastic line!!
++the [insert name here] was almost robotic. fucking great!!
LOVEDD it!
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lol thanks im glad you liked it, its one of my favs
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interesting write.
best of luck &
thanks for entering!
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Love it.
Love this love this love this!!!!!!
Welcome to the finalist's list!!!!!!
Good luck!
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great piece...i enjoyed reading it...especially seeming it was dirty pretty...i also enjoyed that the punctuation wasnt to much or to little...just enough and i also loved the lines
Try not to miss me dollface,
I wont think of you,
I'll be with him [Insert name here]
the insert name here i really liked for some reason...thanks for entering good luck
XchaoticXdisasterX
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Can I just add a last line, as I feel I should. Not for you to use, but for me... As I feel this way myself sometimes.
[you'll get over--->me love, i promise]
[they.always.do]
♥
Thanks... Emotional for me and very very true. Love always x
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Simply excellent. Just dirty enough to be dirty pretty, yet not obscene. Thanks for your entry & best of luck in the contest
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Okay, now this is what I'm talking about!! I can feel the neon signs and the orange glow thrown from streetlights at 3 o'clock in the morning in some concrete-jungle of a city while a girl tells her boyfriend that she just doesnt want to be with him anymore..that it was all a facade. I love this poem. I think we should definately try to write one like this in "regular" style and give it a happier ending. What do you think?
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haha i never write when im babysitting im gonna have to try it.
{You'll get over------>me love, i promise}
i lalalove that line B. you have such an amazinggg talent for writing, im jealous. :/
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lol. babysitting? That's when I get my best writes! lol. This was great, sugar. Positively amazering! lol.
To figure out the sweet n.o.t.h.i.n.g.s i kept wispering in your ear.
{The /fabricated\ anythings you wanted to hear}
That's the part that totally got me.
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This is...interesting It's almost like listening to someone speak. I liked this, it's pretty cool
Midnight
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