I'm a multipurpose daddy.
So says my little boy,
A firetrucking daddy
Ever better than a toy.
Sometimes we are a choo-choo train
Chugging down the lane.
Sometimes he just needs holding,
Shielded from the rain.
I make a splendid monster
A tiger, or a bear.
Now, he's afraid of monsters,
I'll be cautious not to scare.
Perhaps we'll fight a fearful foe
Or find where distant rivers go.
Maybe, he just need holding,
While the winds, they howl so.
I'll answer a million questions,
A horde, a host, and more,
Finding answers to such questions
Is what this daddy's for.
And trying always to be nearby
Whenever he may need to cry.
I'll scoop him up, hold him,
'Till the thunder passes by.
Sometimes, I read a story,
A poem, or a song,
A soothing bedtime story
When the night has grown too long.
Then snuggle against his sleepy form,
Keeping his little body warm.
Perhaps, I just need holding,
Some comfort through the storm.
A contest entry
- Do You Want To Be Featured? by B Chandler.
700 points, ended June 22, 2007, 31 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Raven Qualifier - General: Free Verse, Rhyme and Everything Else by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 140 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Baby Bed Time Book (CONTEST) by Viyanna Rosemarie.
650 points, ended May 27, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is fantastic! thank you for entering it into the contest for jordyn and i wish you the very best of luck. viyanna rosemarie
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What an amazing Daddy! You captured the relationship between a father and his son in such a delightful and charming way! Any son would be honored to have a father who would write something like this! Wonderful piece!
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For myself, this was a very touching piece. I have a distant father, and this piece embodies everything I would image a daddy should be. Wonderful write.
Best of Luck.
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Gosh this was beautiful and so very comforting I almost felt like a small child again while reading this. I am sure your children will love to hear listen to Daddy read this poem to them...if not now then maybe when they are older. Great write and thanks for sharing!
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very wonderfull poem! your flow to it was amazing (minus one line but i will overlook that concidering the rest was fantastic)
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LOL..so nice when someone reads your poem and truly understands it, isnt it, er um...mommy?
Upstaged by mommy once again
A dad who is fun, imaginative...who's a transformer, educational and above all makes his little one feel special and safe,
A heartwarming poem and very well written,
galfalfa
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I like how it doesnt exactly rhym, but it flows. Hopefully someday I can be a mommy just like you.
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Mommy???
It does rhyme, in fact it follows a very specific rhyme scheme...
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I am confused whether this is suppose to be a childrens poem or for older people. the language is that of a children poem but you are speaking from an adults point of view. anyways this was a cute little write. It also has impressive credentials. congrats on the trophies.
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The simple answer is that it was written for both. The original draft was written with my son while tryin to teach him some general poetic concepts.
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This was such a sweet poem. It was very heart touching and it made me smile. Great write.
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You have some very well woven words donning the page here as well as an infusion of beautiful expressions and feelings. Write on my dear friend and keep spreading your enchanting words across the pages to warm and inspire us all just as you have done here.
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Awww. That was so sweet. I loved it. And this was very beautiful in the fact that we do need more fathers like this.
write on!
~*~SP~*~
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This is a very touching, heartfelt poem. It's very obvious that you care for your little boy and that's very sweet. However for me this is a bittersweet piece. I get the same feeling from this as I do the song Butterfly Kisses. Because I don't have any memories with my father until I was 14 and even those are limited to one month with him... So yeah.
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this poem is amazing i wish there were more multipurpose daddys in this world...ive got a lil one on the way that will never know theirs.....i love the poem....
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beautiful and heart searching read here
Yes indeed this world certainly need more multipurpose daddies . Excellent write here. I remember my daddy on sunday mornings when all us kids would pile up in bed with him with our jammies and he would read us the funnies with all the different voices and noises .
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Just what dads should be doing with their children - they certainly should see him more than just at the breakfast and supper table. Wounderful to be able to do this and spend this quality time with them. They will always remember it and later thank you for it. Congrats on taking gold and the HM in the two contests.
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Such a father has become a certain rarity, but reading your words gives me hope! I think the meter accented the piece wonderfully, and the words were perfect. I come away from reading this feeling challenged and uplifted at the same time. Good job!
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This is absolutely lovely. I think we all need a Daddy like this. Congratulations on winning the gold. You deserved it!
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aaaaaaaah, this is sweet! Awesome job! I'll answer a million questions, A horde, a host, and more,(I know this feeling every parent should
...) Good luck in the contest! You did a great job!
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The best part about this piece, with respect to the comments of my fellow judge, is that it confronts the reality that often we are as overwhelmed as our children. We are tired, and scared, and worn down... and life seems to never find us at our best. The piece was nice up until the end... the stuff to make you go "Awwwwww." But it didn't really shine until the moment when you allowed the reader to see into your inner-child and admitted what so many of us are afraid to say - we too need comfort.
I am at a time in my life where comfort is in short supply. And Dante's long, hard, road, the one that goes up from Hell into the light is but a poetic conceit when you are not even done with the descent. This piece reminded me that there is always a place to turn... open, accepting arms that are free from the troubles us adults so frequently find ourselves immersed within.
On the techical front: this piece employs a basic flow scheme, but since it does it well, we can't hardly hold it against you (nor do we really want to). Some subject matters need a gentle touch such as this and while I can find no particular genius upon which to place my thumb, I can, markedly, relate to the sentiment provided within and thank you for the message you have communicated as well as for your entry.
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first of all, thank you for NOT showing me what i THOUGHT the title would bring. whew! secondly, i absolutely adore this entire write. too sad that not all little boys and girls can have a 'multipurpose daddy'. your form, rhythm and everything about this works very well. thank you for entering it into this raven qualifier and i wish you well with your endeavors here. my favourite part of the write is:
I'll answer a million questions
A horde, a host, and more
Finding answers to such questions
Is what this daddy's for
without answers from the ones who are suppose to care the most, our children do not learn. you have some very lucky children in your life. {and if you don't, you will have}
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My imagination is cringing at what you might have thought it would bring, lol
Thank you
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This is fantastic. A wonderful tribute to those loving and protective fathers out there. The ones who love their little ones more than life itself and dedicate every moment not already reserved for those small hands, heart, and body who need them oh so much. Well Written and I hope to read more from you soon!
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