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Child of Kingdom Come

Born beside a mountain stream
Child of kingdom come
Everyday she gathers dreams
For every-one...

She dances under an autumn moon
This child of kingdom come
Hidden 'neath her cloak of stars and runes
Her spider dreams are spun

Here is where the sky's expanse
Spreads as far as the eye can see
This is where she can be found
In her garments of leafy weave

Past and present crease her brow
Child of kingdom come
Her eyes are jewels of crystal light
This child of kingdom come

While...
All day long she dances with the sun

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  • Abnormal
    May 28

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    This is good. I like the rhyming that you've done, and the wording was very nice. Overall, I liked the first verse most, and the imagery was great. A good write! Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest!

  • Abnormal
    May 28
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    This is good. I like the rhyming that you've done, and the wording was very nice. Overall, I liked the first verse most, and the imagery was great. A good write! Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest!


  • januaryrain gold member
    March 7

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    Wonderful rhyme and flow, I really love it. I don't think it fits in the contest. It has a more fantasy feel to it than nature type poem.
    Thank you for your entry, I really enjoyed it.

  • ecrivain01 gold member
    February 18

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    Just wondering ...

    where is Kingdom Come? I"m curious since I read a marvelous book called The Little Shepherd of Kingdom Come. I'm curious as to how you define Kingdom Come?


  • ASmileForYou
    December 11, 2008
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    This is beautiful. The imagery is so vivid and different. It is so natural. Thanks for entering!

  • piccola silver member
    October 20, 2008
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    thanks for your entry


  • owlish
    August 11, 2008
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    Sweet, sad poem... I'm not sure how it helps me though...


  • Melissa Burns
    July 22, 2008

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    thank you for entering my ever so humble little contest!!!!!!! Best of luck in the contest


    Love the dreamy feel to this poem!


  • ReachingForStars
    April 9, 2008
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    This is so beautiful! It took my breath away. Amazing poem!


  • xox-emma-xox
    April 3, 2008

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    Beautifully done! I cannot say how much I like this poem! Butt..... I don't think it fits the contest. Thanks for the entry, though. Good luck in the other contests!
    Emma ^_^


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    January 3, 2008

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    Many thanks for taking part in contest 5. ‘Fantasy’ in our rounds of contests in the Rhyming Extravaganza.
    We have been surprised by the wide range of entries that we have had and the standard has been exceptionally high.
    Please join us in the future rounds and enter writes that we would love to read and enjoy.

    Thanks again for your entry,

    Sue and Jeff


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 7, 2007
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    Nicely done. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for entering into the contest and good luck.


  • warrior-eagle
    October 11, 2007
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    All i can say about this is : aw

    ....Simply Me♥


  • Blossom Fairy
    September 26, 2007

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    Smiling at you!!!

    Now, do go to this poetry site:http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html

    and look up the names of the two forms in this contest and study the examples. Then do decide which one your poem suits?

    It is a darling poem, and I love it plenty well, dear one.


  • bruntbeauty
    July 10, 2007

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    I loved it really, but the rules have to be followed and you have to enter the option number in the notes. Thanks.


  • Lie 2 Me Once Again
    June 19, 2007
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    Great write Thank you for entering


  • Greggs Girl
    June 8, 2007

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    To me, strong beginning and weak ending. Good but not good enough to impress. Thanks for entering though.
    MeganReneeWilson

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