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The Last Time I Saw Peter

There in the Auschwitz camp I last saw Peter,
That was the climax of our love affair.
We did not get the chance to say our last words,
My eyes told him that I love him by my whole heart.

He did not ask me for kisses,
As he would have asked in the “Secret Annex”.
But I kissed Peter in my mind a thousand times,
I hope by now he got rid of his inferiority complex.

Between Peter and me there were Nazi barbwires,
But in our heart there were no fences,
As our love was limitless,
And that was the last time I saw Peter.



Author notes

Anne Frank’s The Diary of Young Girl influenced this poem. Both Anne and Peter died in the Second World War.
Auschwitz: The Nazi German concentration camp in Poland
Secret Annex: Anne Frank and Peter’s families were hiding in a secret annex of a building in Amsterdam, Netherlands.

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  • rhondasail
    August 20, 2007

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    I find this a very good premise for a poem and the basic 'proseyness' is acceptable, but I think you could tweak it a bit, adjust the rhythm and make it even more readable...an example would be in the first line...to make it read just as the last line does to give an opening and closing of like kind and rhythm, something like this: "That was the last time I saw Peter/ there in the Auschwitz camp/the climax of our love affair/ our last words-never got the chance/ with my heart in my eyes/ my 'I love you' was realized...", just a suggestion to give a tighter rhythm...You have a wonderful eye for the poignant moment, and I imagine that English is not your mother tongue, but overall you do quite well. Peace, Rhonda


  • dubiety
    August 9, 2007

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    Anne Frank.

    I immediately recognised this poem as Anne Frank. I loved her diaries, so moving and honest. Well done for this excellent capture of how she felt.

  • Leaving Today
    June 9, 2007
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    This is touchy, I liked the last stanza most.


  • freespirit51
    June 7, 2007

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    Wondefully written piece. I believe this to be a true tribute to young Anne and Peter. I am glad to see her diary will finally be allowed to be seen by all. Great work and good luck in the contest.


  • Forgot2Breathe
    June 6, 2007

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    This is beautiful, and i do believe that this would've happened if Anne and peter reunited.

    Great work!

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