Morality is obscured,
Tinted by tribulations
That composes murders,
Rapist and any form of criminality.
The song is sung by the
Paedophile who hides behind
His cloak of respectability…
The self-centredness of mankind…
The media who create the
Illusions that life is a fairytale…
The parents who shelter
Children from reality which
Falsifies life,
And eludes them when older.
Fashionable society, fickle
With wannabes and lovelies
And I’m most popular.
Let’s release these
Unrealistic expectations
That society sings hoarsely.
Our nation’s constitutions were
Principles taken from the bible, from this
We got love, morals and respect.
We reinforced these elements
In our home, school and church.
I only ask…
Who stole our hymn book?
In a list
A contest entry
- increase the peace [or something along those lines] by Sofia Nadia.
1050 points, ended November 25, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Express Yourself by SOLS.Moonlight.
600 points, ended June 5, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The last line made me laugh, but I could feel the truth in the words. It is a shame that society is the way it is today. This poem flows and speaks out on a long ignored subject. I wish you luck in the contest.
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Your last line says it all...thanks for your entry
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way to go girl!!! unmask the mendacity! K x
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Nice write. I understand the meaning behind it quite well, and it does flow with my prompt. I may not agree with the ending, not being Christian myself, but instead pagan, but I do understand what you were trying to convey. No matter what religion we live our lives under - the morals are the same. You guys have the commandments, the hymns, the biblic stories...we have ours too.
Morals are worldwide.
Thanks for entering my contest
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Very well written piece, even though I can say I am probably diametrically opposed somewhat to the ending viewpoint in this piece, though it opens up discussion and makes one think.
Good write and congrats on silver.
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"Morality is obscured,
Tinted by tribulations".
Such a great opening start to this poem. So many points expressed in such a creative way. I read this poem intently and felt your every word. It spoke out against society and you presented exactly what I wanted.
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Very creative and unique!!
This rare piece presents a different slant on life - while hiding behind cloaks of normalcy, some "human beings" present a mask of respectibility, - all a horrid facade... Like being inside a house of mirrors, or a shop of horrors... We cannot trust anyone anymore; and on the Sabbath - who is singing from the Holy Hymnal? Your masterpiece, "Ills of Society" is an extraordinary portrayal of the masses of sordid humanity we meet and greet, swarming on the streets of our daily lives, the very same broken and misguided folks who shape our wicked, gluttonous, self-destructively blind world. There can be no doubt as to the reason for our malfuntioning society. Pretty sad. Like you wrote, "Let's release these unrealistic expectations." This poem is one that should be written on all our foreheads!! Who can define the range of normal functioning of our modernistic society of excessive self-indulgence anymore?!!? It's left to the phenomenal poets in our midst; those who harbor unflagging consciences to teach, guide - and yes - even warn us; poets such as yourself. Tremendous work, I love the moral of this marvelous, poetic write!!!! Peace and Love, Cyn
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bravo
These are my favorite lines:
Fashionable society, fickle
With wannabes and lovelies
And I’m most popular.
I love that. The message is clear and ended so brilliantly.
well done, Kj
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Great political poem.
Excellent question posed ... who did steal our hymebook? The answer is those who took this country, and decided freedom meant choice beyond God, Country, Morality or even common sense, at times. Too much freedom perhaps?
Again, a wonderful political poem that could spur tons of debate. It is written very eloquently and has a flow that pulls you to one side. Well done. -
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I thank you!
You are right in what you said i do agree with you. never mind the country the world is in a mess. i enjoyed reading your comment.
Slán Dolores xx
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To think
Loved how your last line tied everything together and made the reader think, indeed....and ask him/herself that question. Your piece was so true...everything has changed from black and white to murky shades of grey in which we have lost our way (not to sound too cliched). Loved the pace and flow of your piece. Was awesome.
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Smart peice
And so true. we seem to be heading towards the abyss. secular progressive thinking & though not religious I believe that without it we may create chaos. & yes where is the hymn book. excellent write
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It's very sad how true your poem is and how people know this and don't try to change it. Which is the saddiest part. Because of that people just keep getting worse nowadays. Great poem and great message! Hope you win!
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It's a sad fact that most of us close our eyes to what goes on. I hope that I'm not guilty of doing that. Keep writing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this poem. Makes one stop and have to really think hard about some of the stuff we do in our lives! Especially in today's faster lives we lead. ~Sie
Good luck in your contest
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I agree Natures song,
life today is far to fast! we need to slow down
and take a good look at what we have created over this past fifty years or so.
thanx for commenting and applauding this poem.
Slán Dolores x
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It's sickening how true your poem is. Great write
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Thanx so much for your comment. it is appreciated very much.
Slán Dolores x
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Good for you...
the founding people included slave holders, believed no one should vote unless they owned a lot of property, women should not vote, misogynists, and used the bible to justify these too, but your points are so well taken that the modern society would benefit from reinforcing values that have some roots in time and tradition. Good for you...PK
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Hi Pk!
We do need to reinforce our values, life is full of selfness.
No one cares any more do they.
Thanx for your brilliant comment back it was to the point i was making.
God bless
Slán Dolores xx
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This is a wonderful poem. So many truths stated so eloquently. I love the last line. It is somewhat humorous. Thank you for sharing your talent. Best of luck in the contest.
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Many thankx and hugs
for replying to the poem i do appreciate your applause also.
Slán Dolores x
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I always appreciate poetry that raises questions such as these. You have presented many questions with a nice flow. GOod work here. Keep it up.
Creatress
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this is so true, every word
it is such an eloquent way of putting it all
bravo
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Thank you so much for your kind comment and your applause.
i am greatful for them.
Slán Dolores x
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Fantastic
and every word so true,
you are Great, you are amazing You are annonymous so i'll stop there LOL
good luck dear friend!
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Many thanx Lexi,
i do apreciate your kind comments.
take care Mss Ó'Neill.
Slán la gra
Dolores xxx
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ooops forgot these little wabbits
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Ya might want to take he 'e' out of hymn book unless you want it as such to remind us of our lost virginity
, I guess we all have lost that through the ills of the world in one way or another, but some of us do go back and re read what we learnt as a child and try to help mankibd remember what made them so special, love, hope and faith can heal the world 
Love, C
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Lol,
Oh Chez i re-read that and still forgot to change it lol. i have mended it now.
Thanx mate for the applause and coment.
it means a lot coming from my favs.
Slan Dolores xx
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