Fuck peace, Let's go to war
Bomb the world, blow down the doors
Let the iron rain, blood coats the ground
Kill the sons, release the hounds
Acid Bath, burned alive
Burning flesh, just fucking die
Screaming agony, crying pain
Capture them all, wrap the chains
It's the others that are evil
This is a war for peace
Killing women and children
It's what the world needs
Kick in the Doors, to there homes
Blast iron shells through cranial bone
Flaming, burning, screaming death
Fight for the lies that I've said
The words from my mouth send Sons to fight
They bleed out and cry late in the night
Bullet to the face, straight through the jaw
Hands crushed and mangled to form rotting claws
Tore apart limp from limp with fifty caliber rounds
Corpses matching in damage all around
Flamethrowers turn the bones to ash
Widowed women gets raped up the ass
Soldiers are the law, they do what they want
Nothing to stop them as they fuck a Dead mans daughters' cunt
This is the War, this is what you don't see
This is the fate of starving families
They started this war, they weren't the same
Had they, been like us they'd not have been blamed
It's to late for that let them Burn in hell
Let them be buried together in an iron cell
Taste of power, is what I got
I'm getting stronger with every baby that is shot
I'm out for blood, they aren't like me
All in the name of my country
It's a never-ending slaughter, an eternal Hunt
I'm a true patriot, a true Americunt
A contest entry
- Congestion of Options- Ignite the Muse by FunnelWaxFate.
1000 points, ended June 22, 2007, 76 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Serious Poetry by pineapple-eyes.
800 points, ended August 30, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A view such as this is definately a HUGE part of the problem.
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The harsh, ugly truth here. Nice write, but it could use a spellcheck.
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Jello Biafra rides again! plenty of angst here! good job!
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Shit, dude. I can honestly say that you are the first person who really let it all out. You really did well on taking this to the level I wanted it at. Thanks for fulfilling my needs x]
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lol... I see that I'm getting help with the contest judging lol
Because of the abundance of entries into the contest... I will not be breaking down the score... but will be quick commenting.... your score is...26 ... out of 40.. I didn't like the topic...thank you anyway for entering and participating in my contest, and good luck,
~luminescence
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Your score
Ok so I came up with a scoring system (see main contest page)
you score is as follows
Title: 8
Wow: 8
Flow: 5
Read: 5
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Wow....
well you have the emotion down....I didn't like this to start out...i thought you were talking aboiut the american soilders, and I was going to get really mad...but I see that you weren't good...I like this...and something tells me that one of my co jugdes will too....well written...was on the edge of my seat the whole time...
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I really liked the idea of comparing American soldiers with murdering devils as there is a close correlation. It is a pity your otherwise clever poem is smothered in grammatical errors. If you put them right, let me know and you will probably win gold in my contest.
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Thank you very much for your wonderful entry. Very well penned indeed. Best of luck in my contest and a very Happy New Year!
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You could really feel your angst and emotion through the words of this piece. It was dark and edgy, but it really works with the context. I know people write about war all the time, but I have never read anything that depicts, and captures, it quite like this. This is a very thought provoking write with a lot of anger and power attached to it. Thank you very much for entering, KP
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Speechless my friend.
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Wow, amazing write, here. This throttled write has some absolutely stunning and amazing imagery entwined throughout this gnarly, snagging write. The use of strong language really enhances the effect, makes it more booming and grasping, I must admit. This poem is a major slap in the face, really opens the eyes of any sleeping, unsuspecting reader that might happen to stumble upon it. The truth in the piece is so devastatingly real, and it describes the horror, sickness, agony, injustice…really, I could go on with a million more negative nouns and adjectives for war, it captures them all. “It's the others that are evil
This is a war for peace
Killing women and children
It's what the world needs” throughout this piece is the oxymoron logic, the tyrant view, attempting to cover up the truth, to mask the war hunger, hatred and greed with ill logic. This poem is exemplary and so well done!!! -
I love war, humans are savage creatures by nature anyhow so it's all good.
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