ego
brushes with fate
on ascension upwards,
endeavor of enlightenment,
ignites,
conflagration of arrogance
to tempt the god’s fury,
as descends his
karma
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butterfly cinquain
Comments on Disbelief:
Such great classical reference you have added in your poem:
Elysium's gossamer chattel withers and dies
each time a heart
passes into the cold harsh realm,
You have described the hindrances to flowing new thoughts, and your descriptions are eloquent and evocative. I really liked how you took the picture and made such a great statement about how disbelief can hold back those who believe. Very well done, good luck in the contest!
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Splendid Entry ~
As always, your BC is gorgeous ~
Perfect count....thank you ~
The best things about this write is that
it was cliche', yet ..................it was
generous with grammatical
beauty and superb imagery ~
Hard to do with a cliche' write ~
Well done Hun ~
The best to you ~
Bear ~
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a butterfly cinquain seems very appropriate for the story of Icarus. I like the one by Auden, Musee des Beaux Arts http://myweb.dal.ca/waue/Trans/Auden-Musee.html which is based on the Breugel painting, The fall of Icarus.
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OH I totally love the format you used... If you don't mind sending a message of how to do it~ I would greatly appreciate it! TRULY THIS IS FANTASTIC it creatively genius!
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Poor Icarus, pride was indeed his fall was it not? Great butterfly cinquain, you always make it look so easy, best of luck in the contest!!
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Susie
Very well written. I can remember back in the seventies, when on occassion I too, like Icarus, thought that I could fly. I don't take that stuff anymore.
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karma
not some thing i like having all the time but is just part of the day to day life that we live.
We get what we get.
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Excellent
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