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Life's Romance

Life's Romance

 

Am I destined to this fate?

I only hope it's not to late.

I gave away my heart to fast

emotions bloom yet, never last.

I tell myself I must let go

memories past I can't control.

For some, it may not seem a lot

but moving on is all I've got.

Looking back at history

nothing's left behind for me.

Destiny is owned by none

yet, through luck, controlled by some.

Tomorrow is another day

some will go, some will stay.

For the ones left behind

I hope we meet again sometime.

And if by chance we don't meet

as our journey life's complete

do not fret should I stay

for darkness follows everyday.

Above the stars, across the moon

time for some ends to soon.

So, dance with life in sweet romance

for this may be your only chance.

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Written August 6th, 2003

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A contest entry

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  • teardrop silver member
    February 24, 2004
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    Hi Pati,
    Thank you for your reply. I love it when other writers dig deeper into my port. Thanks again!!

    TD

  • Com Pati
    February 24, 2004
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    Wow another great poem. I am so impressed with your writing. It is so sincere and so from the heart. You are a beautiful writer...I really enjoy your poems. Dont worry I'll keep reading Keep Penning!

  • -aLoNe-
    December 22, 2003
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    Wow, this is a really good poem! You did a great job putting all your feelings and thoughts into such a well thought out and descriptive poem!!!! All the words in your poem have meaning and say something to the reader. You also had a good rhyme scheme. Keep up the great writes!!! Check out some of my stuff sometime. Good job.
    hannah


  • teardrop silver member
    December 17, 2003
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    Sharon,
    I agree with you, poetry from the heart is the most ernest! And yes, I write and write and write. I guess it is my way of releasing what needs to be let out. Thank you for your kind reply.

    TD


  • teardrop silver member
    December 17, 2003
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    Hi Raven
    I love reading your replies. They are so full of inlightment and add special meaning to my words. Thank you, my friend!

    TD


  • December 17, 2003
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    I agree with Raven Aurora, this poem lemds itself to hope and inspiration. No matter what has happened or will happen we must grab life by the horns, hang on and live. I think poetry from the heart is the most ernest. It's okay to tell, tell, tell... because in telling you also show. Keep sharing in your own special way. YOU are a Survivor. Thank you so very much for entering my contest. Keep hope alive, sometimes I think it's all we've got.

    Sharon


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    November 17, 2003
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    {Tomorrow is another day
    some will go, some will stay.}

    Yeah, that's true...nobody can continue to live in the past forever...and we can't worry much about a future that isn't really promised to us, because it's never concrete as to whether we'll live or die the next day. Sometimes I think I'd be better off dead, especially on days like today, but then again...

    This is a beautiful work, filled with hope and joy. Maybe you feel your words are random, but they splayed onto the page with impeccable precision. I love this piece!

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • teardrop silver member
    September 7, 2003
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    WOW Sparky! Your reply defiantely is making me grin...thank you!

    TD
    Edited on Dec 17, 6:36 p.m. because 'typo'.

  • Stephibaby06
    September 6, 2003
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    wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this is one of my "wow" poems. THe kind of poems that blow me away and i can't say anything but "wow"...but this was a really great poem. THe thing i liked the most was probably the flow...and it flowed wonderful...and you still were able to have a great choice of words. Sometimes some people concentrate to much on the flow and not the choice of words...but you were able to capture both and make a wonderful peom. GREAT WRITE! thanks so so so much for sharing. I really enjoyed this poem . God bless you!! and....WOW!!! =D

    ~steph~


  • Katinkatze
    August 18, 2003
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    ohh this is beautiful, and...uhm...got me sad at the same time... "this may be your only chance" i wish id have listened to that saying more often on more important things... sigh

    katze


  • audrina
    August 7, 2003
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    Very well put, confused at first but sure that you need to face it no matter what. A great write, thanks for sharing


  • Freak On A Leash
    August 6, 2003
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    *standing ovation* Great poem here. Tomorrow IS another day!Its good some people can realize that after a relationship!
    ~***Kasondra***~


  • teardrop silver member
    August 6, 2003
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    Scarlett, thank you for your wonderful critique. You've been a busy reader tonight...lol

    Myron, thank you for your critique but i write only from my heart and from my life's experiences. I guess you would need to know my story to understand my words. As far as simple and no character, nah, I disagree. I happen to think this piece is self explanatory, it's about life!

    TD


  • myron silver member
    August 6, 2003
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    too easy

    this poem has simple rhymes & simple thoughts. it is written in an impersonal way. it has no life, no thoughtful details, no insights,
    & very little playing with language.

    whi not make this poem live? why not give it some character? why not put yourself into it? are you a real person or a cliche?
    poetry is not about sending messages, it's about oputting the right words in the right order to show the reader what is happening. what you do in this poem is tell, tell, tell.

    you should show, show, show...


  • Scarlett silver member
    August 6, 2003
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    :: Gasps :: You said: Tomorrow is another day! Oh! You're the coolest person in the world! I LOVE YOU! LOL Okay...Maybe not...But still--I am now going to read more of your work...MUCH more..Grea great job! Keep up the good work! And tomorrow is another day! LOL

    !~*YS4e*~!
    Scarlett

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