Describe a friendship? How shall I describe?
Acceptance of what is, and equal place.
No pressure there to change, an easy pace.
No questions asked, no need to offer bribe.
Just soul mates. Is this how I should ascribe?
Friendship: Allowing each his private space.
Can nothing, ever lead to fall from grace?
True friendship, is forever, we inscribe.
And yet this perfect friendship is no more.
Just memories of silly, simple bliss.
One moment, like an arrow to the core.
A lesson learned, regretting always this,
and wishing we were back just like before.
A friendship spoiled now, by a single kiss.
Author notes
A Petrarchan Sonnet
Option: 5c
In a list
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- c) My Bronze Awards • next in list
- d) My Honorable Mention Awards • next in list
A contest entry
- BATTLE OF SONNETS ROUND 2 by mamad.
550 points, ended June 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Loss of a Friend by hobo-candy.
300 points, ended June 22, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Friends by Scrunter.
1750 points, ended July 14, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE SONNETS ROUND 6 by mamad.
2400 points, ended August 10, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - When Friendship And Love Collide. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended October 1, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your entry,I am sure many can relate here, Josephine
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this is really good. thanks for the write!
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congratulations to your bronze award, dear pat !
a very heartwarming message about true friendship, even if a drop of bitterness has fallen into its sweetness towards the end - but hey, that's what voltas are for !
an excellent job done here in this multiround, my friend, I have enjoyed this journey very much ...
thank you for having been a fellow traveller ...
marion
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I loved the way this started out as a true friendship and how friendship should be, then ended up being quite sad. I have been through this and know the exact feeling. A good write in which I truly enjoyed reading.
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very nice
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Very nice. The last line seems to me to have eleven syllables in it... or did you want spoiled read as one syllable, ie spoil'd?
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Thank you for your comment, but I still count it as 10:
a friend ship spoiled now by a sin gle kiss.
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such a common experience, and written about so well.
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Awww I really liked this sweetly penned poem and how gracious and beauty this poem is. I really loved the swaying motion of the worlds and it felt like I was in the meadow reading this poem and the prarie land grass was chest high and swaying to the widns beat. I just really enjoyed reading this. very well penned and keep on penning away
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Shhhh. I reserve the right to remain silent regarding the inspiration for this poem
Thank you for your comments.
Pat
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Perfect in every way ( I have learnt a lot about these lately
) and you have all the elements just right. Wonderful concept of friendship sweet and sour.
Wish you well in this round hon.
Linda
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Well done, with two looks at friendship. The first is what good friends expect - love without demands. The second is a stinging memory of loss; worse because of blame. I found the punctuation excessive, some periods may be better as commas or less. Best of luck!
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