It is wrapped in darkness
The waves of the ocean,
Are the only sound heard
It is high above all things on the shore
On its seat a man sits
His eyes fixed on the sky
Stars spread across its dark blanket
The ocean wave crashes, breaking silence
The man sits alone, without a companion
But he has the stars
Which is all he needs
At this time.
Author notes
This was the first poem I wrote. The assignment was to write a love poem about an object. I decided to hit it at a different angle.
A contest entry
- Help us write a stsory by GarbageCan.
300 points, ended August 12, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - it's what you lack by pepper this.
400 points, ended August 20, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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umm this is a really nice poem but I am going to have to remove it, if you read the contest then you have to write a sory defining a character I am sorry for this but unles you can tell me how this defines a character and a description of an avaerage day of their life it will be removed, that is all.
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hey you gotta do what u gotta do....I don't have many poems that describe characters so this was a long shot...dont worry about it.
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this doesn't have to realy be a poem, we are looking more for a story, so if you can turn your poem into a story, add to it or seomthing but so far you have a good set up just need a little more
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this is a good poem just not sure if they could use it in their story unless they take to sea and this lifeguard of yours turns into a captain of a ship.
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yeah i figured it was a longshot
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