Thrown from the clouds
Racing other drops
Through hot summer air
A magnificent view
That can’t be seen
By human eyes
Towns and cities
Seen from afar
Look small from here
The specks of rain
Meet with the people
They soak the dry soil
Drops hit in harmony
A random symphony
Playing for the people
Author notes
I wanted to write and it was raining....do the math
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Lovely
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Very lovely visions of scenery painted, good flow to make a nice post,thanks for entering and most of all for entering..MM
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Great write. Love the metaphors. Thanxx a lot for entering. I wish you all the best of luck in the contest.
Luv,
Candy,
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good.nice.cool.like it.i may think it needs some work there and there but u did a nice job.thanks for entering.
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i did the math and it is very good I enjoy the rain and The musical connection you have made. I like the way you have coloured it in mystery you seem to have only tempted the colours and sounds of the rain but that has hightened my senses becasue I was able to fill in the mysterious gaps. well written good luck in the contest.
favorite lines were
"Drops hit in harmony
A random symphony
Playing for the people"
beautiful you made everyone feel equality in just a few lines where everyone stands still and listenes to the beauty of natures music. well done:
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Rain has always seemed like music to me...whether softest pitter-patter of notes upon pane or the crashing symbols falling hard in echoing strains.
Nice write, thanks for the read! Blue
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