Dedicated To The American Soldiers!
How does a soldier feel fighting a war?
Does he always know what he is fighting for?
Maybe he knows,but doesn't understand
Why he is in a faraway land
Like so many others he is there for a cause
And like the rest he doesn't pause
He has a job that he does well
Even as his comrades beside him fell
The pain he feels is so deep
He takes time to weep
But when he has to continue fighting for
Our freedom and fighting to make our world
A safer place
You will know he doesn't do it for the glory!
This is not a story
This is reallife
He is a Real American Hero!
Author notes
This is a poem I am honoured to have written for the American Troops!
ScottishPrincess -3).Titles
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
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What a pleasure to read
This is so kind of you...mac
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Thank you
for your support and the interest you yake to honor our military,we are a proud bunch to back these men and women when they need it the most!
I am positive they are supporting all the world that
begs for peace..
again thank you for your entry, good luck
MM
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I'm glad you support our troops. America is running out of patriotism and it's a sad, sad sight. Good luck in my contest.
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I am honoured to support the US troops,I find it sad that America is running out of patriotism but although I live in Scotland I am patriotic to America,Hazel
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thank you for showing your support. it is true we don't always understand why we are in distant lands, it is true we are not always sure who we are figihting for. But our core values, Service before self. and our traditions... death before dishonor drive us on. thank you for sharing.
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wow. thank you for entering. and i really liked this poem because it shows that soldiers usually don't always know every thing that is going on but are still willing to do what they must. i am glad that you have honoured our soldiers in such a wa! thank you!
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Great job. It is always a pleasure to see a real appreciation for what soldiers go through. I always enjoy your work.
Mike
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An honour to write about what soldiers go through on a daily basis,I just write from within,Happy Thanksgiving to you and your family,feel free to read my new poem,Hazel
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Why do you not sit down and ask a drafted vietnam vet who was 18 years old when he served as many were for an answer? Find one and talk before they are all gone.
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Please may I put the link to your poenm on my page with the rest of the links for this contest for the whole group to read -
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Of course you can,feel free, you have my authorization to do s
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Amen to this
Our blessings are with them always and this truly should be a gold . Bless your heart for this wonderful truthful write to our men and women in the services
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Such an honour indeed to write this for our men and women in the services!
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Hazel--Much appreciation for your beautiful poem.
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A honour to write!
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This is nice...
Thank you for entering my contest.
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I enjoyed reading inside the head of a soldier. Every line being capitalized was a little confusing to me, however. Thank you for entering
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A very special tribute to our troops.Good luck and thank you for entering my contest.
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i really like how you portrayed a soldier in this poem. all the sacrifices they make. thanx for entering & good luck!
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You know when I came across your contest I knew I had to enter,the poem means alot to me and although im not American I feel a special bond with this poem,I am thinking of sending this to Good Morning America,Hazel
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Great Tribute!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You have written a tribute worthy of reading by all AMerican troops or all troops from all countires fighting this war on terror....I feel they would be honored and refreshed in their resolve and commitment after reading this piece!!! Thanks for leading me to this wonerful piece you have penned for these heroes worth of honor!!!
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Great Poem
My first impression is the depth of feelings you have our for troops. I liked it all, however I have some thoughts that I would like to run by you.
In line 8, I would leave out the word (beside, and),try it and see if it is not smoother.
In line 10 if you insert (the) between takes and time I feel it would be smoother.
Line 12, I would leave out (and fighting).
In line 13 I would leave out (You will know).
I feel that it would sound better.
I know that this sounds very critical, however for me I just loved this poem, and felt these change might help it flow much smoother.
I really liked the title and the first and last lines they were very discriptive for this poem.
These are the only changes I would make.
I shouldn't be the one to critize your poetry as I have never gone to any classes on writing poetry, I just know what sounds good to me.
There many times after I have submitted poems then went back and reread them I have seen sopmething I could change that would make them better. I hope that there is someone out there that would give me pointers on my poems as I would like to do better.
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Hey this is good
you are more of a patriot then most I know. god bless you & read my .. " American Son" if you can
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I am honoured to have written this too!...I am just a loyal supporter of US and its my dream to go there.
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"Even as his comrades beside him fell.
The pain he feels is so deep
He takes time to weep" Those lines really strike a chord. My Dad would tell stories of his time served in Vietnam...he lost many friends in that war and many of those were killed right before his eyes. It brings tears to my eyes just thinking about it. I can only imagine what it must be like. I think you've done a great job of capturing the essence of a soldier. Fantastic job!
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My Honour!
This is my honour to have written this and it upsets me today that there are some of the young people don't seem to care or respect people who were in the war,and I am gonna send GMA that poem too. -
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I think that youth today is just misguided. It's not so much a lack of respect for the soldiers as it is lack of respect for the President and distaste for war itself. They are too preoccupied with what dress to wear for the prom and what boy/girl they want to go out with. I think that if wars were ever tp be fought on this soil, their perspective would change considerably. I think it would be a great idea for you to send this to GMA this one!!
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Society Today!
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Very true. I think that they need to inform themselves and then when the time comes for them to be of legal age to vote, they will have the power to do what they think is right by this country. They need to care!!
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