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Twunderful Daydream

The sun that strikes your face                        DP
the wind that tousles your hair
how I would love to be these
to touch and caress you
to hold you close like I once did,
these are the things that occupy my dreams...

Forever bold the wellness of you I know                NH
Sense we met that day under the blue stars which
reflect off the green grass at our feet.
All those times we met together by the cherry tree.
Just to hold hands and laugh
And chitter chatter about the days to come.

I held your hand                                DP
and laughed at your jokes
I did what u wanted,
I love u
I need u
we laughed
and we cried
but always u held me
and helped me go on
never did u give up on me.

I … did not mistake that fire that burned        NH
there in your green eyes.
I, did not mistake the passion beginning
To burn the deep of us, in you, in me
I love you too.
Out of you in to you
I felt right, next to you entangled.

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  • EternitysLastWish
    September 7, 2007

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    Beautiful. There is a great sense of unity between you both as you write together. Your words and vocabulary flow really nicely together - this piece is a stunning example of a true team effort
    well done to both!

    ELW


  • kkatie55
    June 9, 2007

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    touching

    this is so lovely you two write well together....i feel the warmth of love pouring through your words...well written ....hope u two write again together...peace katie


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    June 6, 2007
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    Welcome to All Poetry !

    A very nice collab write. I really enjoyed reading this. Lovely imagery penned in your words.
    Thanks so much for sharing. Keep writing, reading and commenting.

    If you need any help here at AP please don't hesitate to contact myself or any other online Greeter. We are always willing to help
    Gaylene