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I Touched Him

Ache befitted him as its companion.
Dried, crystal tears blended the melody.
Cupid waited in the quiet shadows.
Then, arrow sailed to bring sweet company.

His heart was pierced in fond declaration.
A thick black cloud then moved itself away.
Reflection of a touch that I shared then,
Continues as reminder of that day.















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OPTION 2

Sometimes a simple touch is all one needs. That does not necessarily mean that the caress has to be of the physical nature. Spiritual, emotional, and/or gestures can change someone's life as well. Positively touching a life could be accomplished in a word.

My first poem is the prewrite.



OPTION 3

My second poem entitled; "Empty Tears" is the newly written poem.

http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3150564






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  • Aurora Ceres
    August 25, 2007

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    How true this is. Amazing the power contained in one simple touch. Very well penned. I wish you all the best in this contest.

    Bella

  • infinate abyss
    August 6, 2007
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    Can you submite "Empty Tears" actually into the contest please? : ). (I know I had it screwed up before so you could only enter 1 entry, but i've fixed that and so now you should be able to enter both (it's okay if it shows up as a pre-write, I'll know it's your new one!)
    Amanda


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    Seems as if you have that magic touch - that which makes things change for the better. Easy to read and understand what's being said in these lines.


  • Rele anmwe
    June 14, 2007

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    Another great piece of poetry by you again. It seems as if you have that short poetry thing on the back pocket of your tight jeans. I love the flow of this great piece. Keep up the great work and thank for sharing.


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    Very Good


    His heart was pierced in fond declaration.
    A thick black cloud then moved itself away.
    Reflection of a touch that I shared then,
    Continues as reminder of that day.

    Wonderfull crafting of words

    Rick


  • photay.poetry
    June 7, 2007

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    "smile a lot. it cost nothing and is worth a lot" from life's little instruction booklet.i love that book and this tip is one of my favs.


  • Folken
    June 6, 2007
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    wonderful writing. thank you for entering.


  • BeautifulFlame
    June 5, 2007

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    I Loved this !

    It is so true that just a simple gesture can change someones life .
    My favorite lines were these ,

    Reflection of a touch that I shared then,
    Continues as reminder of that day.

    A beautiful reminder.
    A beautiful read.
    ~Lisa~


  • individuality gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    aye, though touching physically is nice it is not the be all and end all of life - take online here for example or people who write letters to each other, they still touch and share their spirits and words can caress hearts and minds with ease - a good poem

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