Moon Light
sparkles in the
ripples of cascading
water droplets. As Silhouettes,
they kiss against the night sky. The two hold
tightly as passion fills darkness.
The lovers greet their lust,
within gleams of
Moon Light
Author notes
I hope you like!
In a list
A contest entry
- Rictameters: Class members only by piccola.
450 points, ended June 9, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Contest - Rictameter by Aussie Gypsy.
750 points, ended August 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Just beautiful, you have captured love so lovingly in this piece, well done on a wonderful rictameter
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
Karen -
Wow that was very good lovers greet their lust that is very good. There is some nice imagery here
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lovely but not sure
This is so well crafted but I find that "lust" does not go with the passion and mood of the lovers. Lust is down a backstreet, in a doorway, illicit. Passion and love go hand in hand with romanticism. Nevertheless I liked it in this formal setting of the rictameter. Thanks.
Donald -
Rictameters
I am beggining to like rictameter poems. Next time I think, I should practice writing more of it. About this poem Ma'am it really impressed me.
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Good work from what i can tell. (kind of new at this form, and WAY to tired to count the syllables myself... its 1:00 am here now, but i'll take your word for it that their all there) An interesting subject anyways, I can't think of a way to improve it. Good work!
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Trust me the count is correct~ Thanks for taking my word~ LOL
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Each one I read keeps getting better. This is so romantic. Outstanding write! I'm very impressed with your writing. Wish I could give you more applauds.
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3 claps...9pts
The Poetic Bandits
~Lilac
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A lovely write. Delightfully sensual. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read.
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This was a most enjoyable read! I love reading rictameter, especially if they are done as excellently as this one. The wording you have used in this was very good. Thanks for sharing, I wish you good luck in the contest!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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Very cool. I really like how this poem went from general to specific back to general all in the theme of the moonlight.
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Do like this form, and the vivid visual images thee words give. Moonlight is for lovers, isn't it?
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Yes, Moonlight is for lovers! Theres no doubt!
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The lovers greet their lust within gleams of Moon Light, ahhh just beautiful! Nice meter too, you captured so much imagery here, I can see it well, such a lovely picture you painted, very soft and sensual. Makes me want to go lay under the moon
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very pretty, conjures a nice image =]
-Kaitlyn-
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What a beautiful poem of lovers and the moonlight. This short form of poetry is quite captivating and you have filled it with rich, vivid imagery. Well Done my fellow Bandit.
Dennis :^)
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awww thats so sweet
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Great rictameter
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Excellent!
Exotic vocabulary skills.
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I liked it
very romanti thought. I liked this , "As Silhouettes,
they kiss against the night sky." good imagery.
good write thank you for sharing
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take out "they"
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sensual. the confusing part was the we and then the poem goes on to not talk about who "we" is
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