I met Haydn,
at the piano,
in a beautiful moment;
I thanked him
for his music.
Then, I ran into Walt Whitman,
in the library, he had
some advice for me:
"I know of nothing else but
miracles", said he.
And Mary agreed:
"My work is
loving the world".
At last, I met Jane,
in the rain,
and she confirmed,
"Happiness saved
its most extreme form
for you alone".
A contest entry
- Time For You To Take A Chance ~ Round One by Tears and Raine.
320 points, ended January 26, 2008, 176 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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So you have been talking to walt and all those dead artist. I knew that was why you were so good LOL
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happiness indeed
I thought this was excellent, very light, full of fab images. Made me feel good, and think about words that have stayed with me and helped me. Thanks.
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I'm really glad that you enjoyed this poem.
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This is so different and I really like it. I like things that are different but in a nice sort of way. Pam
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oooh I love this!
I love your allusions to literary greats. I'm assuming "Mary" is Mary Shelley, and "Jane" is Jane Eyre?
I love the brilliant hope shining like a lighthouse beacon (so cliche, sorry) in this piece. It thaws my nearly frozen soul as I read it.
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Thank you!
Actually, Mary here refers to Mary Oliver and Jane refers to Jane Kenyon (but that's ok)
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Great little poem ...
that exemplifies all that is positive and uplifting! A good read that says alot about the person that shared it and good luck in the contest! joy
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Very unique and exquisite. I’ve never read such a poem. Thank you so much for entering. ^_^ Good luck and if you have any questions, please message me. ^_^
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this is a great free verse poem. walt whitman discovered the free verse so we can are free to write however we want and what to look like. free verse doesn't follow rules. rhyming has to follow rules.
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Beautiful write. I liked what Whitman said the best. I think there are miracles in this world that happen to all of us, I think we just need to open up our eyes to see them more. Keep up the great work.
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thank you very much
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Very good I like this a lot. I got the first two but I can't figrue out who Jane is. Call me a do do head but I can't put it together.
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Jane is Jane Kenyon; I only discovered her recently.
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A very interesting write. I love the way you have incorporated historical personalities into your poem. Nicely written and optimistic. Well done.
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unique
a very interesting poem - i like the concept behind it and the story is very cute while also more symbolic than first thought when first read -
Oops! Forgot the bunnies! *
* - oce
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Wow! Well, this is unabashedly optimistic, huh? Reminds me of what Jesus said about entering the Kingdom of Heaven: that we must all enter like children, with that openness and trust that only they truly have. I believe these are core beliefs that we must all cling to, now more than ever, so good job! - oce
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love
the font and background brightened me before ever reading your work. Then I read. Thank you for this. I love the idea that we should become familiar with the masters so they can advise us, teach us, enlighten us. Excellent job. Excellent reminder that these are the 'Legacies' we shouldn't forget. Thank you!
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