gigantic waves roar as they set foot in human territory,
tearing at the land
and ripping the flowers from their safe little beds.
rain drops are singing as they
hit the ground.
hail is knocking at the door.
the sun tries to break through the clouds,
but the walls of that dark gloomy prison hold,
forcing the sun back.
the Sun tries his hardest and with a final try
he breaks through the clouds!
the prison diminishes as the rays are unleashed,
warming the Earth again.
Author notes
option #5
A contest entry
- 193rd Contest by Tarja.
425 points, ended February 3, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very good write
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I agree with the comment below mine, this had some great personification and actually that same part about the sun sort of stuck out for me... thanks so much for entering and good luck.
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Thank You
-Tay
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I like the glimmer of hope at the end. Great personification, especially of the sun. You've provided wonderful imagery. Keep it up!
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hmmmm, this is something, i mean i like this, you did a great job on this, it is a dark poem but yet has something of hope, keep it flowing
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