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Thanks for the memories....?

Waking up to another text, wondering when I'm going to see you next. I waited for your warmth to be here, and I was counting the days until you were near.
I liked to talk on the phone, but I loved it when we were together and I was not alone.

I put up with your mind games, and I loved you for you.
If only you really knew. You broke my heart, you might as well have stabbed it with a dart. I hate you, but I love you. I miss you, but I want you out of my life. I wish it could've lasted forever, but instead it went by so fast. The past was the past, I just really wanted this to last. I cannot sleep, all I seem to do is weep. I hope you miss me, and that your pain is unbearable. You dumped me at the worst time, you made me feel worth less than a dime. To re-live your touch seems like too much. No more hugs, no more kisses, just your cold and bitter disses.

I'm so scared to be alone, but I guess it's for the best. I really need to rest, and I know that you are ready to move onto a new quest. I hope you treat him better than you treated me. For me to see you and him together makes me hope that you're alone forever! I should have been more clever, but it's not my fault. You were my first true love, and now this is our final goodbye. So this is goodbye, this is where we part. I'll always hold you closely, deep inside my heart.

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  • kennethlaney
    July 6, 2007

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    Very good

    A combination of rhyme, verse, and lyrics. It reminds me of a friend on this site that writes very good poetry. (Da-Lyrics) not the correct pen name but I'll give it to you on the next poem of yours that I read.


  • IFeedFromHisKiss
    June 18, 2007
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    I love it

    i can so relate to this


  • SoftlyScreaming
    June 17, 2007
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    the last little paragraph was the best one, but it seemed like this poem was really forced, with the rhyming anyways.. otherwise i liked the concept of it.. welcome to AP, sorry for my critism so early when your here, but its honesty.. if you ever want more feedback, or you need to talk, or you have a question, feel free to come to me.
    -mwh-