I'd Give It Up For You
The Sun, The Moon, The stars Above,
The coke, The weed, The booze,
The air I breathe,
The drugs I abuse,
I'd give it up for you.
The ground I walk on,
The ecstasy I'm jacked on,
I'd leave it just for you,
You took my heart,
And left it in pieces,
These tears I cry for you,
You went out with your friends,
I stole a Mercedes Benz,
These crimes I'd end for you,
Come back to me,
You're the one I need,
One more chance,
I know you would be pleased,
Would you do it just for me?
Author notes
I wrote this poem for Chad, after we broke up, I actually ended up giving it to him initially to get him back but I got nervous and said I wrote it a long time ago, (he said it made him almost cry, which almost made me cry LOL) We are now really good friends and I am actually glad I lied and said it wasn't written for him that day.
(He didn't have a problem with all the shit I did before like the drugs and shit but I thought it added to the poem and gave the message of how bad I wanted him back... pretty sad eh? lmfao)
Lost.Who.I.Am owbi
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wow this is so good, i really hope you and your friend are better now and shit! omg, wow. this is soooo cute! good luck
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good poem
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Very lovely. I adore the feeling of the will to do anything to get someone back. Thanks for your entry & good luck
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this poem was well done. though one suggestion. ecstasy sounds a little long. you could possibly replace it with one of its shorter names like, ummmm, hhmmmmm, oh yea "X." Other than that suggestion I have to say I love how it shows the deep longing for someone. How someone will do anything to get someone back in there lives.
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thank you and you're completely right it would sound a lot better like that... I would change it but, I hate changing poems I have already written.. I still might tho lol
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I think this is well done..
I have more in depth thoughts on this as to the thought process behind the words. This made me think; that's a good thing
Wish you the best; thank you for sharing
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