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Tranquil chaos

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

This woolgathering second

of tranquil chaos,

draws cashmere clouds -

billowing synchronically

with wallowing waves.

 

     She wraps her dreams in paper boats,

     and mirrors nostalgia

     through her eyes.

 

It's the moment

when horizons hum a hymn

of distant hurricanes    (in love)

as the pier echoes moans

of four flirting feet.

 

     But ardor grows into isolation

     as she squints scrutinizingly

     the floating flocks of foam.

 

Her paper boat pictures

drown in the first wafting wave;

She sighs...

then puts her memories asleep.

 

 

 

 

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Leander

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  • Swan song gold member
    December 29, 2007
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    This is a lovely poem Well done.A joy to read.

  • Naridill
    December 5, 2007

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    This reminds me of a book I once read 'The seven sisters' [I think it was called that]. Its simplicity is overcome by poetic beauty and such imagery within metaphors used.

    'She wraps her dreams in paper boats'

    Stunning alliteration used. Not many people on here can write such flowing alliteration and get away with it.

    Thanks for entering
    & you are being removed but all poems which don't make pre-lims will be.

  • seasonsoflove
    November 27, 2007

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    wow... i love the imagery in this... you forgot to add your name tho... best of luck in this contest!
    ~rocklover91

  • CherryOnTop
    November 27, 2007
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    My you have such a way with words. This is well penned and the illustration is simply remarkable.


  • Swan song gold member
    November 16, 2007

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    This is truly an awesome write. I was drawn in from the get go. The imagery was flat excellent. Well done!


  • lindaburns
    August 24, 2007

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    a moment spent in daydream
    of fond and treasured realms
    considering the happenings
    when love was at the helm
    lovely, soft and comforting
    but past and gone away
    and Now come soon with reality
    to bring us back to today


  • Celticmoon gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Lee I may have had to wait for this entry but know I am in no way disappointed. It was certainly well worth the wait. It seems the aliteration king has struck once again You truly have a most unique way with words hun. I adore this piece and I envy your talent. You have complied with all the strictions I laid before you and you have done so with what appears to be little to know effort. Bravo!




    Love ya,
    Bel

  • Lost Like Woah
    June 5, 2007

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    it feels like linen against the skin, while wrapping your tongue in exquisite knots. i like this one alot. reminds me of my midnight dock walks. you do a wonderful job of illustrating rememberance. i love you imagery, it draws to mind all kinds of soft and lovely things. Good write, just what i expect to come from your pen. Lovely.


  • Canto-Brasileiro
    June 5, 2007

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    I really like how you use alliterations!
    The line 'she squints scrutinizingly' almost broke my tongue when I read it aloud though lol
    Ah, the last stanza is wonderful!

    Ik mis jou!


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    I was wondering when you were going to post something again - and here it is! Wonderful poetry...the chaos of the storm and the tranquility of sighs and sleep. Don't I know this too...

    "I so loved this stanza:
    She wraps her dreams in paper boats,
    and mirrors nostalgia
    through her eyes."

    This one just made me sigh... An excellent weave of nature and emotions, my friend. Lovely, lovely poetry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Heavenly Angel
    June 5, 2007

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    Wow! What a truly awesome piece this is! Very beautifully worded and presented..thank you so much! Another fine example of true poetry
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