A crossroad we have reached
Time to say good-bye
Let go of the old memories
And reach for a new life
I know you'll go on without me
In the new road you'll choose
And I know I'll stay here
In this empty crossroad
My past behind me
Haunting my thoughts in swirls
My unknown future before me
Dancing in disguise
Inviting me to live more lies
To go lurk in my hidings
For more coming years ahead
But since I am too tired to live anymore
I'll just stay here in this emptiness
Living the past all over again
Trying to correct what might need to
Then close my eyes
Sink down in my endless thoughts
And lose it all without you
'Cause the crossroad we've reached
Was your beginning and my end
Author notes
I started to write about something else and ended up with this, meh!
Please tell me what you think
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Haunting my thoughts in swirls
My unknown future before me
Dancing in disguise
^ my three favorite lines I like!
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This often happens, we have something in mind when we start, but our muse takes us elsewhere and we end up somewhere we never thought we'd be. Can understand the sentiments you write about here, one;s beginning, the other's end. Some are only meant to be in our lives for a short time, and then move on to other things.
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I started writing a crit about one thing and ended up with this. Look this is really ordinary writing. You need to get away from the cliches and start writing in your own voice. Be more vivid when it comes to the images and metaphors.
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hopeful tone
there are no doubt many phases to changes in relationships and this poem seems to deal with the unwilling need to move on; so this is an interesting thought to many- how to do this; there is hope in recognition...PK
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SO LOVELY!
So often we become lost within our dreams with a loved one only to have them move on with their lives and for whatever reason we just can't move on with them. This is a very beautiful and moving write.
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