Sitting alone in this vast garden.
Creations tears to soon water its first flowers
and this great knowledgeable tree next to me.
Our own secret place,
brought to us by love's white purity.
With my eyes closed
I imagine you next to me,
your breath mingling with mine
like right before you kiss me
...and i realize...it's really there.
I open my eyes and God's Country
is drowned out by the love in your eyes.
Author notes
Romance option and Picture option mostly.i did have a line in there about the rain though.so i dont really know if that counts as weather option.lol.
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i think i saw a poem that was almost exactly the same =( im gonna check into it if im wrong sorry but any way its good =) -
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please do tell me if you did, because i would like to see it to.and thank you for telling me
im going to go browse them myself
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i know ive seen one with the title before but i just cant remember where ill keep looking though it was still a good poem lol
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really nice poem; i liked the detail
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mucho gracias mi amiga
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Short, romantic and beautiful. I like the wording of the closing realization, it gives the poem a depth beyond the obvious words.
s an best wishes... ~Genie~
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thank you for having the contest.
best of luck on your next one.
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it's a cleansing poem with spectacular imagery!
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the rymheing was so choppy my dear but ..the words were so strong and beautifull.i lost my breath..
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Love....
....you should know i dont really give a rip about ryhmeing....lol.most of the time anyways.lol.but glad to see that i still have that affect on people.lol.
thanks for the comment
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Very different indeed. I like it though, great imagery, lovely and powerful. Nice job. The last line was the best definetely.
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thanks love.different from what i usually write or from what you've seen lately?
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from what u usually write although its sitll really good
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Very nice; thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest
Uniquely written
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