The eyes, they shine with something so immense,
A mountain range to rise beneath the sun--
There's something in them making my heart run.
I'm doubling over, panting with suspense,
And wondering if all of my pretense,
So caref'ly crafted, might be overdone.
But how could I resist seeing that one?
From broken hearts, I have little defense.
I know that though it seems like love is sad,
And that the likelihood of loss is large,
I don't know anyone who'd trade their love.
I think it's worth it, even just a tad,
'Cause everything worth having has a charge.
It just so happens, this one's from above.
Author notes
Rhyme Scheme of the Petrarchan Sonnet: abbaabba cdecde
A contest entry
- BATTLE OF SONNETS ROUND 2 by mamad.
550 points, ended June 19, 2007, 9 entries
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This is another mighty fine ebautiful example of a great sonnet set into motion. I really love how you just let yourself go qith this poem and the rhyme scheme is really well done. Very nice work and keep on penning these very beautiful poem
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I'm sorry, but does your comment mean that I should edit something, or read the rules or something? I hope I'm not being dense, but I looked back over the rules and I don't think anything is wrong... unless there is something fundamentally wrong with the structure... this is the right sonnet form, isn't it? I'm sorry to bother you, but I'm just so confused!!
Jen
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