Entire pages have been written on the elegance of love
Above the multiple portrayals stands its most highest sense
Hence the springboard that began it all in the first place; the source
Force of abundance produces such grand delights to write of
Doves with purity appeal shows love in metaphoric tense
Since love is the purest of all emotions it runs its course
Coarse are its ways and means sometimes to produce with its great voice
Choices which form grand schemes of elaborate design so cool
Tools of the trade now used to the best of its ability
Agility it uses too to capture hearts in mid-flight
Citing their need to be loved too; and it seeks to flex the rules
Fueling all the hearts with love's purifying intensity
Density of hate's alluring trap love keeps in radar's sight
Lighting the overwhelming shadow of its intense desire
Firing one by one its workers showing them the better way
Paying the high cost in spades to win the battle for love's sake
Taking as its motto come out of the cold, love warms with fire
Inspiring in the end analysis haters to retire
Author notes
2lullabyhaven
Option #1
In a list
A contest entry
- Form by individuality.
600 points, ended June 6, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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This is a very nice and elegant poem, but for me to come back and judge any oem, they need to have the author username in the author box. Thank you for entering your poem in my contest.
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Thanks, I have placed my pen name there in AN, if its not too late lol
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This is a really beautiful poem and I love the melodic form, very well written. My only problem is this contest asked for halloween poems. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter and I wish you the best of luck.
Bravo
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simply beautiful thoughts.......
This reminds me that love is far stronger than hate will ever be. This is so poignant, and a blessing to read.
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Thank you, I consider that a complimento coming from such a fine writer as yourself. lol
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Very beautiful.
Thanks so much for sharing this exceptional piece. I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
~VIRGOAN~
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The poetic device
in this is wonderful. I don't know what you call it but I like it. Rhyme usually pisses me off but the way you used it makes for an easier meal to swallow. Considering you picked option 1 you were a brave soul. Excellent work. Well done and thank you for entering. -
This is nice, really sweet, though very wordy and slightly colloquial. Phrases such as "so cool" really throw a reader off. I love the images and ideas, however, the wordiness doesn't work well and the rhyme seems off and forced. Overall this is nice. Good job and good luck.
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TY
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The rhyme seems forced in some places, but other than that I liked it, the imagery is good and it paints a good picture
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TY
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I like the form you used-- it's different. However, the rhyme still comes out forced "dove/of," etc. This flows pretty well, and for the most part, the word choice is quite nice. I think with some editing and more innovative word choice, you could have a gem.
Thanks for entering the contest.
Elizabeth -
congratulations Patricia on awell deserved GOLD!
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Thanks Iggy
Yes, very nice to receive. Thank you and
also congratts to you on your Silver. lol
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Congratulations of the Golden shiney, well deserved!
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TY
Thank you so much, I am very happy to get
it. I love the new form too. lol
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Beeeeuuutiful!
What a lovely poem and such a challenge this form was for me... had to dump my first poem and do a second one. 
You have done a marvelous job of this wonderful form that Ian invented! Lovely write!
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TY
I have to admit I was very nervous, I have no structure bones in me, I am more of a free flow-er, but it was fun trying to reign in myself to a set pattern. I began to like it after a bit.
I will check your new one out right now.
lol
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Wow!!
You and the others make this look so dang easy
Holy Moly
Love this one and I had to make so many corrections and finally got it right
then passed out
Magnificent!!
Powerful message
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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ha ha ha
This was a brain teaser of sorts. But,
I did enjoy the long hours it took to
compose it, lol, and yes I did learn something, I won't say what at this time
TY for your review of mine and good luck to you. lol
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I too took the challenge, great work This was a a wonderful piece to read and I wish you luck in the contest ~Tia
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TY
I will be checking out your work as well.
and good luck to you as well. lol
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Beautiful words my friend. Best wishes for the contest.
Hugs and love,
Petratani
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TY
This was so much fun to do. This is its
beginning stage, Individuality just recently formed this new form and named it Melodic, so I was interested in trying it out. Thanks for the review and I hope things are good with you. lol
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it looks a lot better now
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lol
We try
lol
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love conquers all...a great job with this difficult form...well done
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Thanks Iggy
I tried. lol it was challenging, but fun.
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Loves' Emaculate Quest - Love's Immaculate Quest
well looking right off you have the right abcabcc etc rhyme so all good there
line two: its' most... no apostrophe needed
of all emotives - emotions and its' course in same line its course, no need for an apostrophe
its' ways last line of first verse no apostrophe needed with its
the count is right in the first verse
loves purifying intensity - love's here as purifying intensity is belonging to love
Density of hates' alluring trap love keeps in redars sight - hate's rather than hates' and radar's rather redars
the second verse is fine in form and count
for loves' sake - for love's sake
Taking as its' motto - no apostrophe needed with its
Inspiring in the final analysis haters to retire - i am counting one extra syllable here
all in all, the form you have grasped with ease, just need to work with an edit on the grammar and spelling sections and that one line that needs to lose a syllable
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Wow
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Wow
Thanks for all the help. LoL
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