Across the room he catches her eye
She smiles as he slowly draws near
At the scent of cologne she lets out a sigh
So long she has waited, but finally he’s here
Caressing her soft, delicate face
He drags his fingers across her lips
Already her heartbeat starts to race
As he slides his hands down to her hips
He pulls her close with his strong arms
Beneath her blouse he slides his hands
She yields to his seductive charms
Fulfilling each of his demands
He lines her neck with gentle kisses
Slowly making his way to her chest
With one swift motion, her shirt he dismisses
Unclasping her bra to reveal her breasts
She glances at him through eyes of desire
She removes his shirt with stunning ease
He grips her in a blaze of passionate fire
Sliding his hand up her thigh in a tease
He pushes her down onto the bed
He unclasps his belt removing his jeans
He pulls off her skirt, her legs widely spread
Both bodies aching in silent screams
Each of their breathing quickly increases
Beads of passion form at their waists
Groaning and begging for their releases
Together embraced feeling perfectly placed
A contest entry
- Raven Qualifier - Erotica: Straight, Gay and Bisexual by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow
That is an awsome poem.I liked that one ALOT. That is a veryseductive way to describe making love.....That was truely hot.....WHEW!
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Thank you. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I don't write pieces like this often.
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WOW....I'm breathless. You have an unique capability to write an erotic poem. Very few poems can pull me in so captivating me...and this one did. But I will admit that reading this does bring back some emotional pain for me.
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Thank you so much, that means a lot to me. I can understand how you can like something a lot and still find it painful to read at the same time. Happens all the time for me. But thats what poetry is all about right? emotion. Thank you for the wonderful comment and the applause.
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Stunning... breathtaking, really. Flawlessly done, without at all a feeling of forced rhyme. In fact, quite the opposite. Tasteful, yet deliciously erotic. You have a superb skill! Best of luck in the contest, though I hardly think you'll need it. Stunning...
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This one has a tasteful, but living feel to it...as if it's a memory or dream captured in words. Beautifully penned. The only error I noticed was a missed capitalization in the 5th stanza down.
Otherwise, I'd say you've done a fine job, m'lady.
Caressing her soft, delicate face
He drags his fingers across her lips
Already her heartbeat starts to race
As he slides his hands down to her hips
That stanza in particular caught my notice. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.
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hot and steamy, I love it job well done
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Both bodies aching in silent screams...
this was a very hot erotic piece, dear...very well rhymed and worded with an excellent flow...good luck in the contest -
Interesting
Very literal take on the act of foreplay before the act.
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Definitely Seducing
This is seduction at its best, with an air of innocence attached. I applaud you, Shayla. *claps*
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