Hey Daddy,
It's been a long time
Since I talked to you like this.
Too long.
You see if only
You had been there more
You would know me better.
I loved Scouts,
Because you ran it
And it gave me a chance
To spend time with you.
I hated when you went away,
To Antarctica, really Daddy,
It's just too far.
Don't you remember Daddy,
The toy box incident
Or have you forgotten?
I wasn't very old.
Mummy sent me to fetch you
From the front door,
I returned to her with your picture
From my toy box.
The Daddy I knew,
that I could hold close
Even if he couldn't hold me back.
And birthdays, I know I get nice gifts
But just once more, I'd like...
You, you to be there.
I'll be 18 this year Daddy.
You have attended five of them,
That's how many?
And how many do I remember?
Oh, I forgot,
You wont be there this time either
You're in Nepal, with the Scouts,
And not me.
Who took me to hospital,
When I cut open my face,
Because it wasn't you.
Who helped me get better,
After illnesses, or when I grazed my knees
Because it wasn't you.
Why don't I ask you, the medic
For help, when I am in pain, or ill
Because I don't think you know how
To deal with a child.
You still treat me like one sometimes
I hate it, I grew up without you
And it hurt.
I love you Daddy,
And I still seem to be a child
Because you never shared my childhood
Well, very little of it.
I am 18 this year Daddy
Spend some time with me.
Just me.
Love your little girl
Crying Inside
xxx
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Mm...Mm...Mm...good! It was sad, and I could feel the emotion. I loved the way you recounted memories you've had, were he is not present. Good.
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So sad. My dad is gone to heaven and I know how precious time with him was. Nice job. Thanks for entering.
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great write. very sad, yet with good memories as well. thanks for entering
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Oof. Simple, but utterly wrenched with emotion; pouring from every tendrils of the poem; even though that last line is cliche, still added harsh tone and firmness, along with a strong finishing climax of your emotion. Excellent write. Thanks for the entry.
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My final words to you are firstly its a brilliant write my friend keep writing.. I wish I could give all of you a trophy but i can't but i give you my blessings take care thanx for entering -
Wow it is a brilliant job with this piece.. So sad and im sorry for what has happened.. Thanx for entering ill get back to you.. Gud luk and have a great 18th burthday
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you did such a wonderful job with such a touchy subject. A fathers love. My father died and I never got to say goodbye before he died because i did not know about it. I know how it is to be treated like this by your father. This is beautiful. You did very well.
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Wow, this one almost made me cry, because it reminded me so much of my biological father. I idolized him as a child, and he was fun and all, but then he cheated on my mom with the woman who is now my stepmother, and she has turned him into the biggest asshole known to mankind. It seemed that he is still only a 48-year-old child, who has been led astray because he is afraid of saying no to someone in authority. Some days, I hate him for all the abuse that he and my stepmom have subjected my entire family to: the countless court battles, blackmail, and manipulation. But some days, I feel sorry for him, knowing that he only went along with her because he hasn't got a mind of his own. He seems to think that money can buy love, but he will realize too late that all of his money can't buy his daughters back.
Thank you for writing this, it affected me on such a personal level. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Laura
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Thankyou for your comment, and I hope, that even through all your trials, you can still love your father. I still love my father, but it really does make me sad that I have very little memories of him, and now, he is divorced, and I only see him every other weekend. I miss him, and he's in the country. Thank you for telling me your thoughts.
Please take care,
Nadine XxxX
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very touching poem. I wish I have a closer relationship with my dad.
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a truly beautiful but sad poem. a subject that hits me on a very personal level. it is very hard for someone to uderstnad why a parent it not there for them whether it is work related or they cannot face seeing them, this poem shows what happens when a parent forgets there child.
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What a GREAT poem
It tells the common story of parents placing false values on what is important in life. This applies in so many different ways to what is far too common nowadays. WELL DONE>
Hugs
Jan
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how very sad this write is from you. you have made me wish to cry so i think you will do well in this contest you have entered. good luck. viyanna rosemarie
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i like this a lot.
its sad but it deliver alot of emotion all at once. It really was very good and nice.
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i like this alot....
very good..
great job...
this is very touching....
Heather
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