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Pallid Shine

                                      P
                                      A                             
                                      L
                                      L
                                      I
                                      D

                                      S
                                      H
                                      I
                                      N
                                      E

                                      P
                                      E
                                      E
                                      K
                                      S

                                      O
                                      U
                                      T

                                  Against

                          An inky backdrop.

              Seems to be hanging from a string,

              Held in heaven’s golden fingers in the sky.

            Displaying its splendor to the world,
             
                            Glittering, smiling
     
                                    Star.

Author notes

yes also for the dreaded poetry project *bloodcurdling scream accompanied by lise clutching her face, leaving fingernail prints*

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  • DeadlyTurnip
    June 16, 2007

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    Nice Concrete

    I don't usually like concrete poems, but I liked this one. Like some others, I liked how you left the definition until the end. Nice job!

  • WriteOrWrong597
    June 6, 2007

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    Hm...Good job. I like it. Hey, poetry projects aren't that bad...They got me writing, and a bunch of my friends, too. Interesting imagery...Great. Keep it up!

  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 5, 2007

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    creative and golden i like that in the poems i read, and you did a wonderful job on this, keep it flowing

  • tsarina
    June 4, 2007

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    I love your adjectives. it makes the image so clear in your mind. I also like how you leave the defenition of 'pallid shine' to the end of the poem which keeps the person to keep on reading. great concrete poem!